Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph compares the the number of contestants who participated in various activities at a social centre situated in Melbourne, Australia over the period of two decades from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, film club participants were at the top and remained same throughout the given time period. The number of table tennis players increased gradually whereas amateur dramatics attendees number dropped in the final given year.
At first glance, the number of people who participated in the film club occupied the highest position, at around 62 in the initial years which decreased slightly to nearly 60 in 2010, again climbed to about 63 in the last given period.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully address the task. While you have identified some main features, the analysis is incomplete. You have not provided data for all categories shown in the graph, such as the martial arts or musical instruments, and the description of the trends is too brief. To improve, you must ensure all data categories are mentioned and compared, and provide a more comprehensive overview of the trends over the entire 20-year period to meet the length requirement and demonstrate a full understanding of the data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into an introduction, an overview, and a single body paragraph. While there is a logical attempt to sequence the information, the lack of development makes the overall progression feel disjointed. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'whereas' and 'at first glance', but the limited length prevents the use of a wider range of linking words to connect ideas effectively. Paragraphing is present, but the body paragraph is underdeveloped. To improve, ensure each main trend is clearly separated and linked with appropriate transition signals to guide the reader through the data.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, with terms like 'participated', 'gradually', and 'initial years' being used correctly. However, the range is quite limited, and there is some repetition of basic structures. There are no significant spelling errors, but the lack of variety in descriptive language (e.g., using 'climbed' and 'dropped' is good, but more sophisticated synonyms for 'increase' or 'decrease' could be employed) limits the score. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise vocabulary related to data trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'peaked'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are some grammatical errors, such as 'the the' (repetition) and 'attendees number' (incorrect word order/possessive usage). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are noticeable. The sentence structures are relatively straightforward, and there is a lack of more complex grammatical forms that would demonstrate higher proficiency. To improve, focus on proofreading to eliminate minor slips and attempt to vary sentence length and complexity by using relative clauses or passive voice where appropriate.
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