Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The line graph illustrates the number of participants in five different activities at at a social centre in melbourne, australia, between 2000 and 2020.
overall, the film club most remained the most popular activity throughout the period, with participation staying staying relatively stable. in contrast amateur dramatics experienced a substantial decline. table tennis showed the most significant growth, while participation in martial arts fluctuated slightly. musical performances also became increasingly polular towards the end of the period.
in 2000, approximately 64 people attended the film club compared with 36 for martial and 25 for amateur dramatics. the number of film club members fell gradually to 60 in 2010 before rising again to about 65 in 2020. martial arts followed a fluctuating pattern , falling from 36 to 32 in 2005 then reaching around 38 in 2010 and finishing at approximately 35.
amateur dramatics rose slightly to about 28 participants in 2005, but then declined steadily, reaching only around 6 people in 2020. By contrast table tennis increased from 15 participants in 2000 to 20 in 2010, before rising sharply to 35 in 2015 and just over 50 in 2020. musical performances started with no participants and gradually increased to around 18 by the end of the period.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the overall trends and specific data points for the five activities. You have successfully identified the most popular activity (film club) and the most significant growth (table tennis), as well as the decline in amateur dramatics. The overview is clear and provides a good summary of the main trends. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are accurate; for instance, double-check the figures for 2000 to ensure they align perfectly with the visual data provided. Overall, the response is well-structured and addresses the prompt effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs that group the information effectively. You use cohesive devices such as 'in contrast', 'by contrast', and 'while' to link ideas. However, the paragraphing and flow could be improved by ensuring that transitions between sentences are more varied. Some sentences feel slightly repetitive in structure. Overall, the progression of ideas is clear, and the information is easy to follow throughout the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'substantial decline', 'fluctuated slightly', and 'rising sharply'. There are some minor errors, such as 'polular' (spelling) and the repetition of words like 'staying' and 'participants'. While the vocabulary is adequate for the task, incorporating more sophisticated collocations or varied synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' would help elevate the score. The range is functional and allows for clear communication of the data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. However, there are several punctuation and capitalization errors, such as failing to capitalize 'Melbourne', 'Australia', and the start of sentences. Additionally, there are minor grammatical slips like 'the film club most remained the most popular' and 'martial and 25 for amateur dramatics' (missing the noun 'arts'). While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher band score. Focusing on proofreading for basic mechanics would be beneficial.
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