Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph depicts information about variation of individuals particpating in multiple activities at a social center in Melbourne Australia during the time period of 2000 to 2020. The film club ramainde most popular throughout these years.

In 2000 total number of tenis players were only 12 and raised to 20 till 2010, but eventually boosted its growth to to players over the next 10 years. However there were no performers in musical activities till 2005 and its trend begin in 2005 which increased gradually to 10 people in 2010 and rose slightly in next decade. The number of actors in drama and theater activities were between 25 to 28 during 200 to 2005. It dropped dramatically and ended up holding only 4 people in 2020, while martial arts players remaind fluctuating over two decads but keept up a good number of players between 30 to 40. Film club the most famous activity begin from 65 individuals in 2000 and dropped slightly till 2010 but gained its potential back in next decade.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have successfully identified the main trends and provided a summary of the data. You covered all categories, including the film club and the various activities. However, the response lacks a clear overview paragraph, which is essential for a Band 7 or higher. Additionally, there are some inaccuracies in data reporting; for example, you mention 'to players' without a figure, and the date '200 to 2005' is a typo. To improve, ensure you group data logically and provide a clear summary of the most significant trends at the beginning or end of your report.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is generally coherent, and the information is organized by activity. However, the paragraphing is weak; the entire body of the report is essentially one long paragraph, which makes it harder to follow. While you use some cohesive devices like 'however' and 'while', the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical. To improve, use clear paragraph breaks to separate different trends or groups of activities and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence to guide the reader through the data.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the main points, such as 'fluctuating', 'dramatically', and 'gradually'. However, there are several spelling errors ('particpating', 'tenis', 'ramainde', 'remaind', 'keept') and some awkward phrasing, such as 'gained its potential back'. These errors occasionally distract the reader. To reach a higher band, focus on accurate spelling and using more precise collocations when describing trends, such as 'experienced a period of fluctuation' rather than 'remaind fluctuating'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'total number of tenis players were' (subject-verb agreement), 'its trend begin' (tense error), and 'in next decade' (missing article). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they are frequent enough to limit your score. Focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring consistent use of past tense when describing historical data.

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