Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph illustratres the number of people participating in five different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia, between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, the film club represents by far the largest number of participants. The figures for table tennis and musical performances increased over the period, whereas amature dramatics witnessed a downward trend. The martial arts group fluctuated considerably.

In 2000, film club had the highest number of participants, approximately 64. The figures remianed almost consistent until 2020 making it the most popular activity. With regard to martial arts, the number of participants began at roughly 37 in 2000, the figures concluded roughly at the same level, albeit of significant fluctuations.

The number of amature dramatics started at nearly 27 in 2000, reaching its peak at approximately 29 in 2005. Subsequently, the figures plummeted to under 10 participants in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response provides a clear overview and selects key features, such as the film club's dominance and the downward trend in amateur dramatics. However, the response is under the 150-word minimum, which limits the depth of the analysis. Furthermore, the report is incomplete as it fails to mention the data for table tennis and musical performances in the body paragraphs, despite mentioning them in the overview. To reach a higher band, you must ensure all categories mentioned in the overview are supported by specific data points in the body paragraphs and meet the minimum length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Overall,' 'In 2000,' and 'Subsequently,' which help guide the reader. However, the progression is interrupted by the failure to detail the trends for table tennis and musical performances. The paragraphing is appropriate, but the lack of development in the body paragraphs makes the overall structure feel incomplete. Improving the logical flow by ensuring every trend identified in the overview is fully described in the body will improve this score.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuated,' 'downward trend,' and 'plummeted.' There are some spelling errors, such as 'illustratres' (illustrates) and 'amature' (amateur), and minor collocation issues like 'represents by far the largest number.' While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main points, it lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands. Focusing on accurate spelling and using more sophisticated reporting verbs or noun phrases would enhance your lexical score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are some grammatical errors, such as 'represents by far the largest number' (should be 'has the largest number') and 'figures remianed' (spelling error). The phrase 'albeit of significant fluctuations' is also grammatically incorrect; 'albeit with' or 'despite' would be more appropriate. While these errors do not significantly impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher band. You should focus on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and ensuring complex structures are used accurately.

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