Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The line graph illustrates the number of people participating in five different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia, between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, the film club represents by far the largest number of participants. The figures for table tennis and musical performances increased over the period, whereas amateur dramatics witnessed a downward trend. The martial arts group fluctuated considerably.

In 2000, film club had the highest number of participants, approximately 64. The figures remianed almost consistent until 2020 making it the most popular activity. With regard to martial arts, the number of participants began at roughly 37 in 2000, the figures concluded roughly at the same level, albeit of significant fluctuations.

The number of amateur dramatics started at nearly 27 in 2000, reaching its peak at approximately 29 in 2005. Subsequently, the figures plummeted to under 10 participants in 2020.

Table tennis had roughly 17 participants in 2000. The number of participants stood at 20 in 2010, then the figures surged to over 50% in 2020. Musical performances had 0 participants until 2005. Subsequently the numbers began to rise consistently, reaching approximately 19 participants by 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response effectively covers all key features of the graph. You have identified the main trends, such as the film club's dominance and the decline in amateur dramatics, and provided relevant data points for comparison. The overview is clear and sets the stage for the detailed body paragraphs. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data comparisons are precise; for instance, stating that table tennis 'surged to over 50%' is mathematically incorrect based on the graph, as it reached approximately 35-40 participants. Always double-check your data interpretation to ensure accuracy in your reporting.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The response is logically organized, with a clear introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the different activities. The progression of ideas is easy to follow. You use a range of cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'In 2000', 'With regard to', and 'Subsequently' to link your sentences and paragraphs effectively. The paragraphing is appropriate, and the information is presented in a structured manner. To improve, ensure that the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is slightly more fluid, and avoid minor mechanical errors in referencing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey information clearly. Phrases like 'witnessed a downward trend', 'fluctuated considerably', and 'plummeted' are used appropriately and add variety to your writing. However, there are some minor inaccuracies, such as 'represents by far the largest number' (the club represents the activity, not the number) and 'remianed' (spelling error). To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate more precise collocations and ensure that your word choices are consistently accurate throughout the text.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. Most of your sentences are clear and easy to understand. There are some grammatical slips, such as 'the film club represents by far the largest number' (should be 'has the largest number') and 'albeit of significant fluctuations' (should be 'albeit with'). Additionally, there is a minor spelling error ('remianed'). While these errors do not impede communication, reducing their frequency through careful proofreading would help you move into the higher band range.

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