Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The Graph below illustrates the information about the number of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
So if we start with Musical performance so in early 2000 there was no participants and same graph follows to 2005 no one is interested in Musical performance. However in 2010 we can see their is a spike 10 to 11 participants participate in the social centre and graph gradually increase in 2015 to 15 and 2020 to 18 participants approx.
Where other side people show their interest in Table Tennis and having a 18 numbers of participants in the social centre in Melbourne, Australia in the year of 2000 and graph show a little hike in 2005 to 20 participants and in 2010 it remain constant to 20 and in 2015 we see a massive hike to 35 participant participate and then it hikes more to 50 participants in the social centre in Melbourne, Australia.
In 2000, Where we see Amateur dramatics starts from 26 participants and then gradually increase to 29 participants in 2005 and in 2010 there is a decline to 20 participants and then we a another decline in 2015 to 12 participants and in 2020 again decline to 6-7 participants.
In the last Martial Arts and Film club in 2000 having a particiapnt count to 37 and 64 respectively and in 2005 we see a slightly decline in participants to 31 to 62, And in 2010 we see a slighly spike in martial arts to 37 and other side we see a decline in
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers all categories shown in the graph, but the analysis is incomplete as the text ends abruptly mid-sentence. While you identify key trends such as the 'spike' in Musical performance and the 'massive hike' in Table Tennis, the reporting is somewhat mechanical, listing data points rather than synthesising the information. To reach a higher band, ensure you provide a clear overview of the main trends at the beginning and ensure the report is fully completed. The lack of a concluding summary or a complete final paragraph significantly impacts the overall task achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often repetitive or mechanical (e.g., 'and then', 'in 2000', 'in 2005'). The transition between ideas is sometimes abrupt, and the final paragraph is incomplete, which disrupts the logical flow of the response. To improve, try using a wider variety of linking words and phrases to connect sentences and ideas more fluidly, and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, finished thought.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'participants', 'constant', 'decline', and 'spike'. However, there are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice, such as 'having a 18 numbers of participants' and 'graph show a little hike'. Some vocabulary is used repetitively, and there are minor errors in word formation (e.g., 'particiapnt'). To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and varying your descriptive verbs to avoid repeating 'hike' or 'increase' throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures. While there are attempts at complex sentences, they often contain grammatical errors, such as 'there is a spike 10 to 11 participants participate' and 'Where other side people show their interest'. There are also frequent issues with subject-verb agreement and preposition usage. Punctuation is inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and capitalisation. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensuring that your verb tenses are consistent when describing past trends.
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