Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The table illustrates the number of participants by activity from 2000 to 2020.Film club is at the top among all of them with the participants of 65 at the starting while in 2010 it is declined and till the 2020 it is again 65. The second comes the martial arts which is recorded of 35 in the 2000 and is declining and increasing. The next turn is off Amateur dramatics which was good in the starting 2000 and is totally down in 2020.Table tennis participants were less l in 2000 while till the end it is increased with the big change with the difference from 15 to around 52. The last but not the least
Musical performances which is recorded 0 in 2000 as well as in 2005 also while in 2010 10 participants were there, in 2015 13 participants and in last 2020 18 students were there so here is all the information provided in the graph
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response identifies some main features, such as the trends for the Film Club and Table Tennis. However, the overview is missing, which is a critical requirement for Task 1. The description of the data is often vague; for example, stating that martial arts is 'declining and increasing' lacks precision and fails to highlight the specific data points or the overall trend effectively. Furthermore, the report lacks a clear comparison between the activities, focusing instead on listing individual trends. To improve, you should provide a clear summary of the main trends in an introductory paragraph and ensure that data points are cited accurately to support your descriptions.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized as a single block of text, which makes it difficult to follow. There is a lack of paragraphing to separate the introduction from the body of the report. While there are some attempts at linking ideas, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'The next turn is off', 'The last but not the least'). The progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed, as the transition between different activities feels abrupt. To improve, you should use clear paragraph breaks and a wider variety of linking words to guide the reader through your analysis of the data.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You rely on basic verbs like 'is' and 'recorded' to describe the data. There are also some awkward phrasing choices, such as 'at the top among all of them' and 'totally down', which are not appropriate for an academic report. The use of 'students' to refer to participants is also inaccurate based on the prompt. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise vocabulary related to trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a significant increase', and avoid informal expressions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Film club is... it is declined'), incorrect preposition usage, and run-on sentences. The sentence structures are predominantly simple, with little evidence of complex sentence forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the lack of proper sentence boundaries. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structure, ensuring consistent verb tenses when describing past data, and practicing the use of complex structures like relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions to add variety to your writing.
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