Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line graph represents information on the number of people that participated in various activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 to 2020.
Overall, it is clear that the Film Club had the highest participants for the period of time. Also the Musical Performance had no participants until 2010 and increased slightly till the end of the period .
The film club fluctuated considerably between about 60 to 66 participants from 2000 to 2020, making it the activity with the highest participants in every year. However, the musical performance was the only activity with no participants for the first 10 years but began with approximately 10 members in 2010 and continued to increase every 5 years and had almost 20 participants in 2020.
Martial art participants consolidated, just like that of the film club within about 30 to 36 from 2000 to 2020, making their participants roughly just half of the film club participants. The Amateur Dramatics began with over 35 participants in 2000 and had dropped to below 20 in 2010 before making a sharp climb in 2015 and 2020, at about 35 and 53, respectively. The tennis had
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, identifying the trends for the various activities. However, the task is incomplete as the final sentence regarding 'tennis' is cut off mid-sentence. This represents a significant omission in reporting the data, which prevents a full summary of the information provided. While the overview is clear and the key trends are identified, the failure to complete the description of all categories limits the score. To improve, ensure that all data points mentioned in the prompt are fully described and that the response is proofread to avoid incomplete sentences.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. Cohesive devices such as 'However', 'Overall', and 'making it' are used to link ideas. However, the abrupt ending of the final sentence disrupts the flow and cohesion of the text. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the lack of a concluding thought or a completed final point makes the structure feel unfinished. Using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring all sentences are complete would improve the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, with terms like 'fluctuated', 'consolidated', and 'approximately' showing an attempt to use more precise language. However, there are some awkward collocations, such as 'had the highest participants' (should be 'highest number of participants') and 'consolidated' used in a context that does not quite fit the data trend. The range is sufficient to convey the main points, but more sophisticated vocabulary related to describing trends (e.g., 'remained stable', 'witnessed a sharp climb') would enhance the quality of the report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are some grammatical errors, such as 'between 2000 to 2020' (should be 'between 2000 and 2020') and 'had the highest participants' (should be 'had the highest number of participants'). Punctuation is generally acceptable, but the incomplete final sentence is a major issue. While the meaning is usually clear, the frequency of these minor errors and the unfinished structure prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and ensuring all sentences have a clear subject and predicate will help.
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