Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The supplied line graph depicts number of participants for different activities varied from the year 2000 to 2020. The data is calibrates in
number of people.
Overall, it is quite evident that Film club was represented for the highest portion in activities, while musical performance was calculated for the lowest one. Furthermore, a significant upturn in the proportion of Table tennis and downturn in the proportion of Amateur dramatics was observed over the given period.
It is apparently seen that number of Film club member is all time relatively stable. As the graph demonstrates, there is a significant increase in Table tennis and decrease in Amateur dramatics. A close inspection of chart indicates that Martial art is increase overall. The data clarifies that people have more interest in Film club through out the time.
At the beginning of the period Amateur dramatics dominant Table tennis but over the next 10 year Table tennis popularities increase and after onward 2010 Table tennis is more popular than Amateur dramatics. Between 2000 to 2005 there was no single participants take part in the Musical performance but over with time it become quite popular with 20 participants
Film club is all time highest with an average participants of 65.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
You have successfully identified the main trends and provided a clear overview of the data. You covered all categories (Film club, Table tennis, Amateur dramatics, Martial arts, and Musical performance) and made relevant comparisons, such as the crossover between Table tennis and Amateur dramatics. However, the report lacks precision in data reporting. For example, you mention 'an average of 65' for the Film club, but the graph shows fluctuations that should be described more accurately. To improve, ensure you use specific data points from the graph to support your observations rather than relying on general descriptions.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical. Phrases like 'It is apparently seen that' and 'A close inspection of chart indicates that' are slightly repetitive and formulaic. While you use some cohesive devices, the connection between ideas could be smoother. The paragraphing is appropriate, but the internal structure of the paragraphs would benefit from a more varied use of linking words to show contrast and sequence more naturally.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'upturn', 'downturn', and 'proportion'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'data is calibrates' (should be 'calibrated'), 'Film club was represented for the highest portion' (should be 'accounted for the largest proportion'), and 'Amateur dramatics dominant Table tennis' (should be 'dominated'). These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your report. Expanding your repertoire of reporting verbs and nouns would help elevate your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
Your writing contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('Martial art is increase'), missing articles ('number of Film club member'), and tense inconsistencies ('there was no single participants take part'). While the meaning remains clear, these errors are persistent. To reach a higher band, focus on ensuring that your verbs agree with their subjects and that you use the correct tense when describing past trends. Proofreading for basic article usage and pluralization would also significantly improve the accuracy of your work.
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