Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The multiline graph demonstrates the data on the numbers of participants for different kind activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.
In 2000, charts shows that film club industry remain constant between 60 and 70. End of 2020 its nearly 70. Marital arts face decline in first 5 years but next 5 years it moved from 30 participants to 40. Also, We noticed martial arts still did not boost as such. Moreover its move between 30 to 40 from 2000 to 2020. Amateur dramatics face real decline in these years. Initially 2000 amateur dramatics moves upward yet from 2005 it the number of participants drops every year. Most of the people interested in table tennis. The real boom comes in table tennis after 2010 from 20 individuals to above 50. In first 5 years people dii not participate in musical performance but after 2005 participants came in this field and gradually the number will increase every year till 2020.
To summarize the graph shows information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response identifies some main features, such as the trends for table tennis and musical performances. However, the analysis is inconsistent and lacks a clear overview. The description of the data is often inaccurate or confusing, such as the claim that martial arts 'moved from 30 participants to 40' while also stating it 'did not boost as such'. Furthermore, the summary at the end is merely a repetition of the introduction rather than a synthesis of the main trends. To improve, you should focus on grouping data logically and providing a clear, concise overview of the most significant changes observed over the twenty-year period.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. The body paragraph is a single block of text that jumps between different activities without a clear progression or thematic grouping. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical and sometimes incorrect way, such as the repetitive use of 'also' and 'moreover' to start sentences. Paragraphing is insufficient, as the introduction and conclusion are not clearly separated from the body, and the conclusion fails to provide a summary of the data, instead repeating the prompt. Using transition words to link ideas and organizing the report by trends rather than by individual years would significantly improve the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'film club industry' (which is not an industry) and 'different kind activities'. The use of 'real boom' and 'real decline' is somewhat informal for an Academic Task 1 report. While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is not sufficient to demonstrate precision. You should aim to use more precise terminology for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a significant increase', rather than relying on basic verbs like 'moves' or 'boost'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'charts shows', 'film club industry remain'), missing articles (e.g., 'in first 5 years'), and incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'the number will increase' when referring to past data). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors. To reach a higher band, focus on consistent tense usage for past data and ensure that subjects and verbs agree. Proofreading for basic punctuation and article usage would also be beneficial.
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