Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph provides the information on the numbers of participants activity in five distinct categories at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, table tennis and amateur dramatics showed the greatest fluctuations, by contrast flim club, martial arts, musical performaces were remained stable through the period.

At beginning of 2000 table tennis participants were nearly at 15, then followed a similar trend till 2010, before rising steeply to 53 participants in between 2015 and 2020. By contrast, amateur dramatics started the year of 2000 by around 20 participants, and it was marginally stable approximately at 34 participants in 2005 before dramatically plummeted to less than 10 participants in between 2010 to 2020. In 2005 musical performances were at zero, then significantly rose to over 10 participants in 2010, and saw a considerable growth from 2015 to 2020, at shy of 13 and nearly 20 participants respectively.

Flim club members were considerably higher among all these categories, it started with more than 60 people, slightly fell to around at 60 in 2010, before following an upward trajectory till 2020. Martial arts participants were around 38 in 2005, then marginally fell to 30, before following a stable trend from 2010 to 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features and trends for all five categories. You successfully highlight the fluctuations in table tennis and amateur dramatics, as well as the relative stability of other categories. However, the overview is slightly hindered by minor inaccuracies in data interpretation, such as stating musical performances were at zero in 2005 when the graph shows a small value. Additionally, some data points are described with slight imprecision (e.g., 'shy of 13'). To reach a higher band, ensure that the overview clearly synthesizes the most significant trends rather than just listing them, and double-check the accuracy of the figures cited.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs that group the data effectively. You use cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'By contrast', and 'before following' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally interrupted by minor mechanical errors in phrasing, such as 'At beginning of 2000' (missing article) and 'flim club' (spelling error). Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different categories. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of cohesive devices and ensuring that referencing between sentences is consistently clear and accurate.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuations', 'plummeted', 'upward trajectory', and 'marginally stable'. There are some spelling errors, such as 'flim' instead of 'film' and 'performaces' instead of 'performances'. Additionally, some word choices are slightly awkward, such as 'participants activity' and 'at shy of 13'. While these errors do not impede communication, they prevent the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on precise collocations and proofreading for spelling will help elevate your lexical score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt to use complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as missing articles ('At beginning of 2000'), incorrect verb forms ('were remained stable'), and awkward prepositional usage ('at around 60'). Despite these errors, the meaning remains clear throughout the report. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Increasing the frequency of error-free complex sentences will also help you achieve a higher band score in this criterion.

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