Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 7.0)
The provided line graph delineates data regarding the changes in the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia over a twenty-year period spanning from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, it is immediately salient that table tennis experienced a remarkable upward trend, whereas the converse was true for amateur dramatics, which witnessed a steady decline troughtout the timescale. Additionally, the most dramatic growth was registered in musical performances.
In terms of the detailed statistics, table tennis commenced at approximately 17 participants in 2000 and subsequently surged dramatically to reach a peak of 52 participants in 2020. Following this exponential growth, the figures plateaued consistently at this high level for the remainder of the period. Similarly, musical performance started at 0 participants and then increased rapidly 18 participants over the period.
By striking contrast, amateur dramatics followed a completely inverted trajectory. The data plummeted sharply from 26 participants in 2000, before hitting rock-bottom of merely 5 participants. Thereafter, this category experienced wild fluctuations until the final year.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 7.0 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
Javob grafikning barcha asosiy xususiyatlarini, jumladan umumiy tendensiyalar va aniq ma'lumot nuqtalarini qamrab oladi. Siz stol tennisi bo'yicha o'sish tendensiyasini, havaskorlik dramatik to'garaklaridagi pasayishni va musiqiy chiqishlardagi o'sishni muvaffaqiyatli aniqladingiz. Umumiy sharh aniq va asosiy farqlarni samarali tarzda yoritib beradi. Siz stol tennisi o'sishini havaskorlik dramatik to'garaklarining pasayishi bilan solishtirish kabi tegishli taqqoslashlarni amalga oshirdingiz. Yuqoriroq bandga erishish uchun barcha ma'lumotlar nuqtalari aniq ekanligiga ishonch hosil qiling; masalan, stol tennisi bo'yicha 2020-yilda 52 nafar ishtirokchi bilan barqarorlashganligi haqidagi tavsif vizual ma'lumotlar bilan yaxshi qo'llab-quvvatlangan. Javob yaxshi tuzilgan va topshiriqni har tomonlama qamrab olgan.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5
Insho aniq kirish qismi, umumiy sharh va muayyan toifalarga qaratilgan ikkita asosiy xatboshidan iborat bo'lib, mantiqiy tashkil etilgan. G'oyalarning rivojlanishi ravon va siz o'z fikrlaringizni samarali bog'lash uchun 'whereas', 'additionally', 'similarly' va 'by striking contrast' kabi turli xil bog'lovchi vositalardan foydalangansiz. Turli tendensiyalarni ajratish uchun xatboshilardan to'g'ri foydalanilgan. Havolalar butun matn davomida aniq va ma'lumotlar oqimini kuzatish oson. O'tish signallaridan foydalanish tabiiy va javobning umumiy izchilligiga hissa qo'shadi.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
Siz 'delineates', 'salient', 'exponential growth' va 'inverted trajectory' kabi aniq atamalardan foydalanib, yaxshi lug'at boyligini namoyish etasiz. Bu tanlovlar akademik hisobot uchun mos uslub va so'z birikmalaridan xabardorligingizni ko'rsatadi. 'troughtout' so'zida kichik xato (imlo) bor, ammo bu muloqotga to'sqinlik qilmaydi. Siz tendensiyalarni tasvirlash uchun kamroq uchraydigan leksik birliklardan muvaffaqiyatli foydalandingiz, bu esa yozganlaringizning saviyasini oshiradi. Yanada yaxshilash uchun imlo aniqligiga rioya qiling va takrorlanishning oldini olish uchun tendensiyalarni tasvirlashda fe'llarning kengroq turlaridan foydalanishni o'ylab ko'ring.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.0
Javob oddiy va murakkab gap tuzilmalarining yaxshi aralashmasini ko'rsatadi. Siz 'The data plummeted sharply from 26 participants in 2000, before hitting rock-bottom of merely 5 participants.' kabi murakkab gaplardan samarali foydalangansiz. Gaplaringizning aksariyati xatosiz va grammatika umuman olganda aniq. 'increased rapidly 18 participants' iborasida kichik kamchilik bor ('to' so'zi tushib qolgan), ammo bu kichik xato. Tinish belgilari va gap tuzilishi ustidan nazoratingiz kuchli, bu esa ma'lumotlarni aniq va ravshan yetkazish imkonini beradi.
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