Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph shows how many people did five different activities at a social centre in Melbourne between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, film club was the most popular activity in all of this years. Also, table tennis and musical performances increased a lot, but martial arts and amateur dramatics went down.

In 2000, film club had around 64 participants and it stayed high, ending at about 66 in 2020. Table tennis started very low at about 16 people, but it grew fast and reached nearly 54 participants in 2020. Musical performances started at 0 in 2005, but it increased to 18 people at the end.

On the other hand, martial arts started at about 36 in 2000, went up a little, but then decreased to 36 again in 2020. Amateur and dramatics started around 27 people, but it dropped down every year and reached only 6 participants in tweny twenty

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all key features of the graph, including the overall trends and specific data points for the five activities. You successfully identified the most popular activity and the contrasting trends between the growing and declining categories. However, the analysis is somewhat descriptive and could be improved by making more direct comparisons between the categories rather than listing them individually. For instance, noting that table tennis overtook martial arts by the end of the period would strengthen the analytical quality of the report. The overview is clear and provides a good summary of the main trends, which is essential for a high band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized into four paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs covering the different trends. The use of cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'In 2000', and 'On the other hand' helps guide the reader through the information. While the paragraphing is appropriate, the flow between some sentences is slightly mechanical. To improve, try to vary your linking phrases and ensure that the transition between the description of the growing activities and the declining ones is smoother. Overall, the information is presented in a clear, coherent manner.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly, using terms like 'participants', 'increased', 'decreased', and 'dropped'. However, the range is somewhat limited and relies on basic descriptors. There are also minor errors, such as 'amateur and dramatics' (should be 'amateur dramatics') and the typo 'tweny twenty'. To reach a higher band, incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'surpassed', or 'experienced a significant surge'. Expanding your lexical range will allow for more sophisticated descriptions of the data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While most sentences are clear, there are some grammatical inaccuracies, such as 'in all of this years' (should be 'in all of these years') and the inconsistent use of articles. Punctuation is generally functional, but the final sentence is missing a period. You demonstrate a good grasp of basic grammar, but to achieve a higher score, you should aim for more complex sentence structures with fewer errors. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage will help improve your accuracy.

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