Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the number of participants for provided difference types of activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia in the period 2000 to 2020.
Overall, Film club activities accounted for the highest participant over the period, while musical performances had the lowest participant. However, it increased after some years.
In 2000, 11 participants were taken part in the table tennis. Amateur dramatics accounted for 25 participants. 35 participants were taken part in martial arts, while film club had the highest participant accounted for 63. Table tennis participants number increased from 15 to 20 in 2010. Amateur dramatics participant number increased 29 but, it was fall 20 in 2010.
Martial arts participants decreased 32 in 2005. However, it increased for 38 approximately in 2010. Film club participant numbers slightly decreased 60 after that, it increased from 60 to 68 in 2020. Martial arts activity accounted for 39 in 2010, which was slightly fall but after remained same in 2020. Amateur dramatics had fall 5 in 2020, while table tennis
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the overall trends and the relative popularity of activities. However, the reporting of data is inconsistent and contains inaccuracies. For example, the text states '11 participants were taken part in the table tennis' in 2000, which does not align with the visual data. Furthermore, the description of trends is often confusing, such as the claim that amateur dramatics 'was fall 20 in 2010'. The summary is incomplete, as the final sentence is cut off, leaving the reader without a conclusion for the final data points. To improve, ensure data points are accurately transcribed and trends are described with greater clarity.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'however' and 'also'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the abrupt ending of the final sentence significantly disrupts the flow of the response. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words to connect sentences and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, logical focus that leads into the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'accounted for' and 'participants' are used frequently, which makes the writing feel monotonous. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'difference types' instead of 'different types' and 'was fall' instead of 'fell to'. The vocabulary is generally functional but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band score. To improve, try to incorporate synonyms and more sophisticated reporting verbs, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with verb forms and sentence structure, such as '11 participants were taken part' (should be '11 people took part') and 'it was fall 20' (should be 'it fell to 20'). The use of prepositions is also inconsistent. While the student attempts some complex structures, they are often inaccurate. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and the correct use of passive and active voice in data reporting.
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