Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph below illustrate the number of participants in five different activities at a social centre in melbourne,australia,between 2000 and 2020.
Overall,the flim club remained the most popular activity throughout the period.While table tennis experience the significant growth.In contrast,participation in amateur dramatics and material arts fluctuated,whereas musical performance shows a gradual increase.
In 2000,approxmiately 65 people participated in the flim club,compared with around 35 martial arts and 26 for amateur dramatics.Table tennis and musical performance had few participants,at about 15 and 0 respectively.The number of flim club members then fell slightly to 60 in 2010 before recovering to approxmiately 65 by 2020.
Participants of table tennis increased considerably over the period.Starting at around 15 participants in 2000,the figure rose to 35 in 2015 and reached about 55 in 2020.Meanwhile,martials art fluctuated between 35 to 40 and it reached aroud 36 in 2020.Amateur dramatics was falling down rached at around 13 participants in 2015 and approxmiately 5 in 2020.finally,musical performance increase steadily from around 10 to 20 participants.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for all five activities. You successfully identified the most popular activity (film club) and the significant growth in table tennis. However, the overview is slightly hindered by minor inaccuracies in data reporting, such as stating musical performance started at '0' when the graph shows a small positive value, and some inconsistencies in the figures provided. To reach a higher band, ensure that the overview highlights the most significant trends clearly without needing to include specific data points, which are better suited for the body paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices like 'In contrast', 'Meanwhile', and 'Finally' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally disrupted by mechanical errors in punctuation, such as missing spaces after commas (e.g., 'Overall,the', 'Melbourne,australia,between'). Improving the use of cohesive devices and ensuring consistent paragraphing will help the progression of ideas feel more natural and professional.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuated', 'gradual increase', and 'considerably'. However, there are several spelling errors (e.g., 'flim' instead of 'film', 'approxmiately', 'rached', 'martials art') and some awkward phrasing such as 'falling down rached at'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the score. Focusing on accurate spelling and more precise collocations will significantly improve your lexical score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses (e.g., 'table tennis experience the significant growth' should be 'experienced') and subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'musical performance shows' should be 'showed'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several missing spaces after commas and capitalization errors regarding proper nouns like 'Melbourne'. These errors are noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding the data.
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