Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line chart illustrates the number of individules who participate in five different activities in in social centre in Melbourne from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, while the number of people paticipated in film club, amateur dramatics, and musical performances increased, the participatent in amateur dramatics rose significantly. In contrast, individuals who join table tennis droped sharply after 2005, whereas it remained relatively stable in martial arts.
Film club activity remained the largest group that attracted people despite a mild dip in 2010, this figure experiencing mild increased from about 64 to approximately 65 participants from 200 to 2020. Followed by table tennis activity, where the participante increased midly from around 15 to about 20 individuals from 2000 to 2010, then experiencing a dramatic surg in number to reach about 52 individuals in 2020, representing the second-highest category. Musical performance activity started to attract people only in 2005, where the number of participant rose gradually to about 13 individuals in 2010, then continuing to increase steadily until it reached about 15 members in 2020.
However, the members of people who joined the amateur dramatics witnessed a dramatic declince, this figure was about 15 individuals until 2005 before
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response is incomplete, as it cuts off abruptly in the final paragraph, leaving the analysis of amateur dramatics unfinished. While the introduction and overview are present, the failure to complete the description of all data points significantly impacts the task achievement. The overview identifies some trends, but there are inaccuracies; for instance, the text claims amateur dramatics rose significantly, while the graph shows a decline. Furthermore, the data reporting contains inconsistencies, such as misinterpreting the timeline and trends for table tennis and film club. To improve, ensure all categories are fully described and that data points are accurately transcribed from the graph.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by the incomplete nature of the final paragraph. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'In contrast' and 'However', but they are sometimes used incorrectly given the actual data trends. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the mechanical nature of the transitions makes the progression feel somewhat disjointed. To reach a higher band, ensure that each paragraph is fully developed and that cohesive devices are used to accurately reflect the relationships between the data points presented.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is adequate for the task but contains several spelling errors, such as 'individules', 'paticipated', 'participatent', 'droped', 'surg', and 'declince'. These errors are frequent and occasionally distracting. There is an attempt to use descriptive verbs like 'surged' and 'declined', but the misuse of these terms (e.g., describing a decline as a rise) indicates a lack of precision. Expanding the range of vocabulary to include more precise reporting verbs and ensuring accurate spelling will help improve the lexical score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Examples include 'the number of individules who participate' (tense inconsistency), 'the participante increased midly' (incorrect word form), and 'the members of people who joined' (awkward phrasing). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma splices and run-on sentences. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction limits the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage is essential.
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