Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the number of participants in five different categories ( film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis, musical performances) at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia, between 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the film club was the most popular activity throughout the period, while the table experienced the most crucial growth. In contrast, participation in amateur dramatics declined considerably. Martial arts fluctuated slight, whereas musical performances showed a gradual increase.
In 2000, around 64 people participated in the film club, make it the most popular activity. This figure decrease slightly to at 60 in 2010 before rising again to approximately at 67 in 2020. The number of people taking part in martial arts started at around 36 in 2000. It failed in 2005 at 32, then again increased to 38 in 2010 and remained relatively stable between 2010 to 2020.
On the other hand, table tennis showed the largest increased during the period of time. It's participant rose up to 50 from the year 2010 while amateur dramatics increased slightly in 2005 considerably under 30 however, it got declined from 2005 to 2020 which is 5.
Finally, musical performances had no participants in 2000 and 2005. However, the figure rose to about 12 in 2010 and continued increased to approximately 19 by 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
You have successfully identified the main trends and provided a clear overview of the data. You covered all five categories and made relevant comparisons, such as noting the film club's popularity and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, some data points are slightly inaccurate or confusingly phrased, such as the description of table tennis growth and the amateur dramatics trend. To reach a higher band, ensure that your data reporting is precise and that you avoid vague descriptors like 'crucial growth' when describing numerical trends. Overall, the response is well-structured and addresses the prompt effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'In contrast', 'On the other hand', and 'Finally' to guide the reader through the information. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical, and there are occasional issues with referencing and sentence flow, such as in the paragraph discussing table tennis and amateur dramatics, where the connection between the two ideas is a bit abrupt. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would enhance the overall flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuated', 'gradual increase', and 'remained relatively stable'. However, there are some word choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'most crucial growth' (instead of 'most significant growth') and 'It failed in 2005' (instead of 'It fell'). Additionally, there are minor errors in word form, such as 'It's participant rose' (should be 'Its participants rose'). To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and double-check your word forms and collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally hinder clarity. Examples include 'make it the most popular' (should be 'making it'), 'This figure decrease slightly to at 60' (should be 'decreased slightly to 60'), and 'continued increased' (should be 'continued to increase'). There are also issues with prepositions and tense consistency. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the main points, they are frequent enough to impact the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage will help improve your accuracy.
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