Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 7.0)
the given line graph shows the number of participants in five different activities at a social center in melbourne from 2000 to 2020.
overall, the film club remained the most popular activity throughout the period with a stable attendence. table tennis saw a dramatic increase to become the second most popular activity, while amateur dramatics experienced a sharp decline. martial arts remained relatively stable, and musical performances were a new activity introduced after 2005.
in 2000, the film club had about 64 participants, for higher than any other activity. martial arts was with 36 participants, followed by amateur dramatics with 26 and table tennis with 16. musical performances had no participants that year.
over the next 10 years, participants in the film club fell slightly a low of 59 in 2010 before recovering to 64 in 2020. martial arts fluctuated between 31 and 36 participants, ending at 34 in 2020. in contrast, amateur dramatics went down steadily after 2005, dropping to just 4 in 2020.
table tennis participants remained at around 19 until 2010, but then surged to 34 in 2015 and 52 in 2020, making it the second most popular activity. musical performances started in 2005 with zero participants, rose to 11 in 2010 and increased gradually to 16 by 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The response effectively addresses the prompt by identifying the main trends and providing relevant comparisons. You successfully highlighted the dominance of the film club, the significant growth of table tennis, and the decline of amateur dramatics. The inclusion of data points to support these trends is accurate. To reach a higher band, ensure that the overview is even more distinct; while you have an 'overall' paragraph, it could be more analytical by grouping the activities by their trajectory (e.g., those that grew versus those that declined) rather than just listing them. Overall, the task is well-covered.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5
The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs that group information effectively. The progression of ideas is smooth, and you use cohesive devices such as 'in contrast', 'over the next 10 years', and 'while' to link sentences. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the initial state from the subsequent changes. The flow is natural, and the information is easy to follow. To improve, ensure that referencing is always precise; for example, ensure that the transition between the overview and the specific data is seamless.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You demonstrate a good range of vocabulary appropriate for a data-reporting task, using terms like 'dramatic increase', 'sharp decline', 'fluctuated', and 'surged'. These choices show an awareness of style and precision. There are a few minor errors, such as 'attendence' (spelling) and 'for higher than' (likely a typo for 'far higher than'). While the vocabulary is sufficient and precise enough for a high band, incorporating a few more sophisticated collocations or varied synonyms for 'participants' (e.g., 'attendees', 'individuals involved') would further enhance the lexical variety.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures effectively. Most of your sentences are error-free, and the grammar is generally accurate. There are some minor slips, such as 'martial arts was with 36 participants' (should be 'had 36 participants') and 'fell slightly a low of' (missing 'to'). These are minor and do not impede communication. To achieve a higher band, try to incorporate a wider variety of complex grammatical structures, such as passive voice or more varied subordinate clauses, to demonstrate greater flexibility in your writing.
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