Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the number of participants who different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia between time period 2000 to 2020.
Overall, it is clear that film club had the highest number of participants while amateur dramatics had the lowest number of participants. In addition, there was a significant difference between the most and least project social center.
Looking at the details, the film club stood at 65 number of participants in 2000 to 2020. It was followed by table tennis with 50 number of participants. Similarly, the martial arts had 38 number of participants, which was slightly lower than table tennis.
In comparison, the musical performance had 19 number of participants while amateur dramatics had only 5 number of participants. In the end of the period musical performance remained was most popular whereas the amateur dramatics is not popular.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have identified the main features of the graph, the analysis is quite superficial. You have listed data points for the year 2000 but failed to describe the trends over the 20-year period effectively. The task requires a summary of how these numbers changed between 2000 and 2020, yet you mostly provided static figures. To improve, ensure you describe the movement (increases or decreases) of the data over time and provide a more comprehensive overview of the trends rather than just listing individual values.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is somewhat mechanical. You use basic linking words like 'In addition' and 'Similarly', but the flow between sentences is often disjointed. The final paragraph is particularly weak in terms of coherence; the phrase 'In the end of the period' is awkward, and the concluding sentence does not clearly summarise the overall trend. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of cohesive devices to connect your ideas more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use the phrase 'number of participants' after every data point, which makes the writing sound unnatural. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'most and least project social center' and 'in the end of the period', which are not standard English collocations. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use synonyms and more varied ways to describe data, such as 'attendance figures', 'popularity', or 'levels of participation'. Avoid repeating the same sentence structures and vocabulary throughout the response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are several grammatical errors that hinder the clarity of your writing. For example, 'who different activities' is missing a verb, and 'between time period 2000 to 2020' is grammatically incorrect. You rely on simple sentence structures, and there is a lack of complex grammatical forms. Errors such as 'musical performance remained was most popular' and 'amateur dramatics is not popular' demonstrate issues with verb tense and sentence construction. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structure and subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex grammatical forms.
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