Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The given line graph illustrates number of contestants for various activities at one social centre in the city of Melbourne, Australia for the timeline of 2000 to 2020. Cultural activities like film clubs , martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis, and musical performances are compared to abstract relevant information.

The number of film club members was at the peak in 2000 with 65 contestants which steeped down a little in 2010 followed by a rise in interest of participants from 2015 to 2020. Additionally, the history of martial arts showed quite fluctuations during this 20 years of time period. Whereas, an absolute downfall in the number of the amateur dramatic participants was observed from 2005 to 2020. The table tennis showed gradual increase in number of participants from 2000 to 2010 but the growth was more than double during next 10 years in the Australia. Furthermore, the enrolment in musical performances began in 2005 and reached to 15 contestants in 2020.

In conclusion, the film club and table tennis are considered most demanding activities if rise in number of participants are observed between 2000 to 2020 in Melbourne,Australia.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main trends for the various activities. You have successfully selected key features, such as the peak for film clubs and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, the overview is somewhat weak; while you mention the most 'demanding' activities in the conclusion, a more effective overview would be placed immediately after the introduction, highlighting the overall trends (e.g., the general growth in most activities versus the decline in others). Additionally, some data points are slightly vague, such as 'steeped down a little', which could be more precise.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized into clear paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Additionally', 'Whereas', and 'Furthermore' to transition between ideas. However, the flow is occasionally mechanical, and some sentences feel slightly disjointed. The referencing is generally clear, but the progression of ideas could be smoother. The concluding paragraph is a bit brief and could better synthesize the information rather than just repeating the highlights mentioned in the body paragraphs.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'participants', 'enrolment', and 'fluctuations'. There are some minor issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'steeped down' (which is not standard for describing graph trends; 'dipped' or 'declined' would be better) and 'most demanding activities' (which is slightly awkward in this context). The vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, but it lacks the precision and sophistication required for a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'illustrates number of contestants' (missing an article), 'during this 20 years of time period' (redundant and grammatically awkward), and 'in the Australia' (incorrect article usage). Punctuation is generally acceptable, but there are minor slips throughout. To improve, focus on article usage and ensuring that your sentence structures are consistently accurate when describing trends.

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