Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line chart illustrates the data on the number of people who participated in several activities namely, film club, martial arts, musical performance and so on, at one social Centre in Melbourne over the period from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the number of participants in the film club activity remained the dominant among all throughout the period. while the table tennis increased dramatically and becoming the second largest activity in the final year. In contrast, the amateur dramatics experienced a downward trend by the end of the period.

At the beginning, In 2000, the film club had the highest number of participants approximately 65 which slightly fluctuated over two decades and then maintained the same figure by 2020. Meanwhile, table tennis stood at 15 number of participants in 2000, which increased to about 20 before climbing dramatically to 54 participants in 2020.

The figure for the martial arts was approximately 36 which fluctuated in between 2005 and 2015 before maintaining the same figure in the final year. 25 participants were recorded for the amatuer dramatics activity in 2000 which rose to 30 in 2005 and then continuously declined to 5 by 2020. The musical performance just started from 2005 and grew to 10 in 2010 and then marginally reached to 15 number of participants in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response successfully identifies the main trends and provides a clear overview. You have selected key data points to support your descriptions, such as the stability of the film club and the dramatic rise in table tennis. However, the report could be improved by ensuring all data points are accurate; for instance, stating the film club 'maintained the same figure' is slightly inaccurate as the graph shows a minor decline by 2020. Additionally, while you mention 'and so on', it is better to list all categories clearly in the introduction. The overview is well-placed and provides a good summary of the main features.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'Meanwhile', 'In contrast', and 'at the beginning' to guide the reader. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical, and the paragraphing could be more balanced. The progression of ideas is generally clear, though the connection between the final sentences could be smoother. Overall, the information is presented in a coherent manner that is easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly. Phrases like 'remained the dominant', 'experienced a downward trend', and 'marginally reached' are effective. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as '15 number of participants' instead of '15 participants' or 'a number of 15'. While you attempt to use varied vocabulary, there is room to incorporate more precise academic collocations to reach a higher band score. Spelling is generally accurate, with only a minor error in 'amatuer'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical slips, such as 'the table tennis increased dramatically and becoming' (should be 'became') and 'the musical performance just started from 2005'. Punctuation is generally adequate, though there are some issues with capitalization after commas and unnecessary commas. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage will help improve your accuracy.

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