Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given line graph demonstrate the data on the proportion of participants for various activities at specific social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
to begin with, In 2000 to 2020 the film club remain the highest number of activities around 75% . the lowest proportion of activities was Musical performance almost 15% only , they was introduce in 2005 and then slowly grow continuously . the third one was Amateur dramatic they was intro in 2000 only 25%. However , in 2005 amateur dramatic was decline rapidly.
Furthermore , In 2000 the meeting table tennis start with 15% only , their proportion rate approximately remain same in 2005 to 2010. Martial arts was almost average number of activity
Overall , its clearly seen that film club was highest number of activity and decline proportion activity was amateur dramatics activity only .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have identified some main features, the reporting is inconsistent and lacks a clear overview of the trends. For instance, you mention the film club remained at 75% throughout the period, which is not supported by the typical nature of such graphs, and your description of the other activities is fragmented. To improve, ensure you provide a clear summary of the overall trends and support your points with accurate data points from the graph. The lack of sufficient detail and the failure to meet the length requirement prevent a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the progression of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes misused, such as 'to begin with' and 'Furthermore', which do not effectively link the data points. Referencing is often unclear, particularly when discussing the activities. To improve, focus on grouping related information together—for example, grouping activities that increased versus those that decreased—and use a wider variety of linking words to create a smoother flow between sentences and paragraphs.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'number of activities' and 'proportion'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'the meeting table tennis' and 'decline proportion activity'. Some terms are used incorrectly, which occasionally hinders the clarity of your report. To achieve a higher band, you should incorporate more precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a downward trend', and ensure that you use these terms in the correct grammatical context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the response that affect readability. These include subject-verb agreement issues ('the given line graph demonstrate', 'they was introduce'), tense inconsistencies ('amateur dramatic was decline'), and missing articles. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences are often faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage when describing past data. Proofreading for common errors like missing 's' on plural nouns and ensuring verbs are in the correct form will significantly improve your accuracy.
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