Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

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The line graph illustrates the data of participants for various activities from one Social Center in Melbourne, Australia from the year 2000 to 2020.

Overall from the graph it is evident that Film Club had the most number of participants while the Amateur dramatics had a gradual decrease. In Martial arts seen a fluctuation over the years from 2005 - 2020 both Table tennis and musical performance had increased their number of participants.

The Line graph delineates that the film club had the highest number of participant from 2000 - 2020. In 2020 it had around 68 participants. The Martial arts had approximate of 37 participants in 2000 and over the year it had a fluctuation and by 2020 it had the same 37 participants.

Furthermore the Amateur dramatics faced a significant downfall. it had around 25 participants in 2000 But in 2020 it was droped below 10 participants. The Table Tennis Had seen a significant increase from 2010 - 2020. In 2000 it had around 17 participant and maintainer the exact pattern till 2010 after that it had grew to around 55 participant. The Musical performance had their participant only from 2005. Later it shown a gradual increase till 2020 with approximate of 19 participants.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have successfully identified the main features of the graph, such as the dominance of the Film Club and the decline of Amateur Dramatics. You also made relevant comparisons between the activities. However, the response is slightly hampered by some inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, you state that Martial Arts had 'the same 37 participants' in 2020 as in 2000, but the graph shows a slight variation. Additionally, the overview is a bit disjointed. To reach a higher band, ensure that your summary of trends is more precise and that you clearly distinguish between the overall trends and the specific data points used to support them.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use some cohesive devices like 'Furthermore' and 'Overall', but the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical. There are instances where the connection between ideas is slightly abrupt, such as the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when discussing the trends for Table Tennis and Musical Performance. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuation', 'significant downfall', and 'gradual increase'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and minor errors, such as 'most number of participants' (should be 'highest number'), 'approximate of 37' (should be 'approximately 37'), and 'it had grew' (should be 'it grew'). While these errors do not impede communication, they limit the precision of your report. To improve, focus on using collocations correctly and refining your use of prepositions when describing data trends.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'In Martial arts seen a fluctuation' (missing subject/verb agreement), 'it was droped' (spelling and passive voice error), and 'had their participant only from 2005' (awkward phrasing). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some missing commas after introductory phrases. While these errors rarely prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and consistent verb tense usage when describing past data.

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