Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph illustrate the figures of participants across different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, film club was the dominant activity through out the period, despite slight fall in the middle of the period, while table tennis was the lowest preferred activity in 2005, ending at the second position, with considerable rise.

In 2000, film club accounted for the highest number of participants, at approximately 65, it then fell to around 60 by 2010, before recovering to around 68 participants. Meanwhile, martial arts was being fluctuated over the time period, starting at around 47 participant, ending with approximately 45.

Table tennis stood at approximately 15 participant in 2000, before overtaking amateur dramatics in 2010, at around 20 participant, it then rose significantly to around 50 participant by 2020. However, amateur dramatics started at about 25 participant, peaking around 30 in 2005, before dropping considerably to around 5 participant in 2020. Meanwhile, musical performance introduced in 2005, with the lowest participants, while increased gradually to around 10 participant in 2010, then rose slightly until the end, reaching about 15 participants.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for all five activities. You successfully identified the dominant activity (film club) and the significant growth of table tennis. The overview is clear and provides a good summary of the main trends. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in data reporting, such as stating martial arts 'fluctuated' when the trend is relatively stable, and some data points are slightly imprecise. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are accurately transcribed and that the overview highlights the most significant contrasts more sharply.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'meanwhile', 'however', and 'before' to link ideas. However, the progression within paragraphs is occasionally mechanical. For instance, the transition between the description of table tennis and amateur dramatics could be smoother. Additionally, some referencing is slightly repetitive. Improving the variety of cohesive devices and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus would enhance the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'dominant', 'considerable rise', and 'peaking'. However, there are recurring errors in word form and pluralization, such as '15 participant' instead of '15 participants' and 'martial arts was being fluctuated' (incorrect passive voice usage). These errors do not impede communication, but they limit the score. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and ensure consistent subject-verb agreement and pluralization when discussing numerical data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses and passive voice constructions, such as 'The line graph illustrate' (subject-verb agreement) and 'martial arts was being fluctuated' (incorrect tense). There are also minor punctuation issues. While these errors rarely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that verb tenses are used consistently throughout the report.

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