Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The line graph illustrates the figures of participants across different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, film club remained the most popular activity throughout the period, despite a slight fall in the middle of the period, while table tennis experienced a significant growth. By contrast, amateur experienced a dramatic fall, while musical performance rose considerably after being introduced in 2005.

In 2000, film club recorded the highest number of participants, at approximately 65. This figure fell to around 60 by 2010, before recovering to around 66 participants. Meanwhile, martial arts fluctuated over the time period, starting at around 35 participants, ending with approximately 36.

Table tennis stood at approximately 15 participants in 2000, before overtaking amateur dramatics in 2010, at around 20 participants, it then rose significantly to around 50 participants by 2020. However, amateur dramatics started at about 25 participants, peaking around 30 in 2005, before dropping considerably to around 5 participants in 2020. Meanwhile, musical performance introduced in 2005, with the lowest participants, while increased gradually to reach around 10 participants in 2010, then rose slightly until the end to reach about 15 participants.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response effectively identifies the main trends and provides a clear overview. You successfully highlighted the key features, such as the popularity of the film club and the significant growth of table tennis. The data is accurately reported, and comparisons are made where relevant. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are fully integrated into the narrative flow rather than just listing figures. For instance, the description of musical performance could be more smoothly linked to the overall context of the centre's activities. Overall, you have covered all parts of the task well.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. The use of cohesive devices such as 'Meanwhile', 'By contrast', and 'before recovering' helps guide the reader through the data. Paragraphing is used appropriately to group related information. However, some transitions between sentences could be more sophisticated to improve the flow. For example, the transition between the discussion of table tennis and amateur dramatics is slightly abrupt. Overall, the progression of ideas is clear and easy to follow throughout the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey information with precision, using terms like 'fluctuated', 'dramatic fall', and 'considerably'. There is an attempt to use less common items, which adds variety. However, there are minor issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'amateur experienced a dramatic fall' (should be 'amateur dramatics') and 'lowest participants' (should be 'lowest number of participants'). These errors do not impede communication, but they prevent the response from reaching the highest band. Expanding your range of synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' would further enhance your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'while musical performance rose considerably after being introduced in 2005'. While the majority of sentences are clear, there are some grammatical slips, such as 'musical performance introduced in 2005, with the lowest participants, while increased gradually'. This sentence lacks a main verb and is structurally awkward. Despite these occasional errors, the meaning remains clear throughout, and the punctuation is generally accurate. Increasing the variety of complex structures and ensuring subject-verb agreement would help improve your score.

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