Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given picture illustrates the data about different tasks which include the distinct number of individuals at one social centre at Melbourne, Australia during the past 20 years.
Overall, in film club and martial art sectors, we saw a constant increased in individual which was below the 70 and 40. Amateur dramatics and table tennis had nearly 20 members during the starting year and showed different results in the last year. Meanwhile, the musical performances come into existence in 2005 and showed a slight increase during the last year.
The first two categories statistically remained on their position from where both started. In 2001, the Individuals were above the 60 and 30 customers, and during last 20 years they were slightly below from 70 and 40 people. The musical performances activities come into existence during 2005 and 2010, but during the following years, dramatic variation was not seen and only 20 participants were there in 2020.
Amateur dramatics and table tennis were almost near to 20 customers after a while during 2010 they reached exact 20 members, the dramatic change occur after 2010, the amateur dramatics rapidly climbed to above 50 and table tennis jump downward below 20 during 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the trends for film club, martial arts, and the dramatic shifts in amateur dramatics and table tennis. However, the reporting is often imprecise. For instance, stating 'below the 70 and 40' is vague, and the description of the musical performances is confusing, as the data shows they start in 2005, yet the text mentions 2010. The overview is present but lacks clarity in summarizing the overall trends. To improve, ensure that data points are cited accurately and that the overview highlights the most significant changes rather than listing individual fluctuations.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical or misused, such as 'after a while during 2010'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult to track which category is being discussed. The transition between the general overview and the specific details is abrupt. Improving the use of linking words (e.g., 'subsequently', 'in contrast', 'meanwhile') would help create a smoother flow between sentences and paragraphs.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. There is a reliance on basic descriptors like 'different results', 'dramatic variation', and 'climbed'. Some word choices are awkward or inaccurate, such as 'sectors' to describe activities or 'customers' instead of 'participants'. There are also minor issues with collocation. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'surged', or 'plummeted', and ensure that terms are used in their correct context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'a constant increased in individual', 'the Individuals were above the 60 and 30 customers', and 'the dramatic change occur'. Subject-verb agreement and article usage are inconsistent throughout the text. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on proofreading for tense consistency and pluralization would significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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