Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph illustrates five various activities and their participants at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia. In the time period of 20 years ([redacted phone]).

Overall, depicting the change in the number of participants, participating in several activites over 2 decades .

First and foremost, the most number of individuals participated in Film club in 2000 and remained on the top of the graph with almost 65 people till the end. The martial arts had showed a unique pattern that is, it deminishes for 5 years then increase for next 5 years and repeats the process again. Then it reached on 35 individuals which was almost same as the starting point.

The amateur dramatics activity initially showed a very little growth but it started to decline from 29 in the year 2005 and reached at the lowest among all to 5 in 2020.

The musical performances was started in 2005 and had showed a healthy growth.

Table tennis initially showed a decline till 2010 but then it showed a great growth and reached 55 till 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all five activities and identifies key trends. However, the overview is weak; it lacks a clear summary of the most significant trends, such as the overall dominance of the Film club or the contrasting trajectories of Table tennis and Amateur dramatics. The description of the martial arts pattern is slightly inaccurate, as it does not strictly repeat every five years, and the report lacks precise data points in some areas. To reach a higher band, ensure the overview highlights the most striking differences and similarities rather than just stating that changes occurred.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and limited. For instance, the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt, and the overview is not clearly separated from the introduction. While the progression of ideas is generally logical, the lack of sophisticated linking words makes the flow feel a bit disjointed. Improving the use of transition signals (e.g., 'In contrast', 'Conversely', 'Furthermore') would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing for clear communication. There are some attempts at using topic-specific vocabulary like 'participants' and 'growth', but the range is somewhat limited. There are also minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'the most number of individuals' (should be 'the highest number') and 'deminishes' (spelling error: 'diminishes'). To improve, try to incorporate more varied synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' and ensure accurate usage of comparative structures.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader, such as 'The musical performances was started' (subject-verb agreement) and 'reached at the lowest' (incorrect preposition). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly in the opening paragraphs. While the meaning is generally clear, the control over complex structures is not consistent enough for a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct preposition usage will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.

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