Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph illustrates the information on number of participants for different activities at one special center in Melbourne, Australia fin 2000 to 2020.

Overall, film club and table tennis despites most popularity throughout the period. Whereas, amateur dramatics had a significant declined. In addition, musical performance had a little increased while, martial arts remained as it is.

In 2000, proportion of film club was 65% after that, it faced a minor decline and than it is rose to 66% in 2020. Despite this film club still had most popularity in activities. Meanwhile, in 2000, interest in table tennis was only 16% but it was climbed to 50% by 2020. Moreover, musical performance starts from 2000 and represented a little increased which was, 10% in given year.

However, in 2000, the proportion of amateur dramatics was 17% in year 2000 but it decreased to only 5%. Martial arts was fluctuated throughout the period which was 45%in 2000 to 46% in 2020

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the graph, identifying the trends for the various activities. However, the analysis is somewhat inconsistent. For instance, the description of 'martial arts' as having 'fluctuated' is inaccurate, as the data shows a relatively stable trend between 45% and 46%. Additionally, the report lacks a clear, cohesive overview of the data, and some figures are presented without sufficient comparison. While all activities are mentioned, the lack of precision in describing the trends and the inclusion of some inaccurate data points prevent a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'after that', 'than it is rose', and 'in given year' feel forced or grammatically incorrect, which disrupts the flow of information. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly when moving between different activities. To improve, you should focus on using a wider variety of linking words more naturally and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, logical focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary range is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word-choice errors, such as 'special center' (likely meant 'social centre'), 'despites most popularity', and 'it was climbed'. These errors occasionally impede the clarity of the report. To reach a higher band, you should work on using more precise terminology for describing trends, such as 'experienced a marginal increase' instead of 'had a little increased', and ensure that collocations are used correctly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include incorrect verb tenses ('it is rose', 'it was climbed'), subject-verb agreement, and missing articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma placement. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on consistent tense usage and subject-verb agreement will significantly improve your accuracy.

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