Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the number of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2020. Overall, the highest number of participants who has done their activities in Melbourne that is Film club of 69 participants . Looking at the data in more detail, the first is film club that is highest number of participants over other activities it is on a top from 2000 to 2020 with 69 participants. The next one is Martial arts who has 37 participants in 2000 and in 2020 it was with 38 participants in the activity. Then Amateur dramatics at 27 participants on 2000 then suddenly fell with 7 participants in 2020. Regarding remaining figures the participants who played table tennis with 18 participants in 2000 then slowly slowly it climbed to 58 participants in 2020. The other last one who has participated in Musical performances they was having 0 participants in 2000 then climbed with 20 participants in 2020. By the end of the period, the highest is film club and the second highest is Table tennis.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, identifying the highest and lowest points and noting trends. However, the overview is weak and lacks a clear summary of the overall trends. The initial statement contains a factual error, stating the period is '2020' rather than '2000 to 2020'. While the key data points are mentioned, the description of the trends is somewhat repetitive and lacks analytical depth. To improve, ensure the overview highlights the most significant changes, such as the growth in table tennis versus the decline in amateur dramatics, rather than just listing individual figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, but the flow between sentences is often mechanical. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes awkward, such as 'The next one is' and 'The other last one'. The progression of ideas is clear, but the lack of sophisticated linking words makes the text feel disjointed. Referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when discussing the 'remaining figures'. Improving the variety of transition signals would help the text flow more naturally and logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. There is a reliance on basic verbs like 'is', 'has', and 'climbed'. Phrases such as 'slowly slowly' are informal and repetitive. There are also some errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'who has done their activities' and 'it is on a top'. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise reporting verbs and nouns related to trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'experienced a significant increase', or 'a steady decline'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('they was having') and awkward phrasing ('the highest number of participants who has done their activities'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some sentences being run-on or lacking proper structure. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and sentence construction would be highly beneficial.
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