Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph illustrates the number of participants in the five various activities( Film club, Martial arts, Amateur dramatics, Table tennis, Musical performances) at social centre in Melbourne from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the film club has the highest number of participants while musical performance has the least. Participants participating in the martial arts remain almost same over the years.

To begin with, 20 people were participating in the table tennis in 2005 which remained unchanged till 2010. Later, the participants surged consistently from 2010 to 2020 and by the end of the time approximately 50 people took part in the game. Participants in the musical performances rose gradually from 2010 which was 10, and later it increased slowly to 18 participants by the year 2020.

Furthermore, the people participating in the film club was 65 initially which dropped to 60 in 2010. Participants increased gradually between 2010 to 2020 to 65 participants. The people participating in the martial arts fluctuated over the span of 20 years. In the beginning, 35 participants participated in the activity of martial arts which later increased to 40, number of people participating varied from 2010 to 2020, reaching to 35 participants by the year 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all five activities and provides a clear overview of the main trends. You have successfully identified the highest and lowest participants and noted the general stability or growth of the categories. However, the report could be improved by making more direct comparisons between the activities rather than describing them in isolation. For instance, noting that the film club remained the most popular throughout the period while musical performances consistently trailed behind would strengthen the analysis. The data points are generally accurate, though ensure that the overview captures the most significant trends rather than just listing individual data points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs covering the specific data. The use of cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Furthermore', and 'In the beginning' helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the referencing could be smoother. For example, in the final paragraph, the sentence structure regarding the martial arts data is a bit disjointed, which slightly disrupts the flow. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus would enhance the overall cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly, using terms like 'surged', 'fluctuated', and 'remained unchanged'. There are some minor issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'Participants participating in' which is redundant, and 'by the end of the time', which is slightly unnatural. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary and avoid repetitive phrasing. The range is adequate for the task, but more sophisticated synonyms for 'increased' or 'decreased' would demonstrate better control over lexical variety.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is always clear, there are several grammatical slips, such as 'the film club was 65 initially' (should be 'the number of participants in the film club was 65') and 'number of people participating varied' (missing an article or determiner). Subject-verb agreement and article usage are areas that require more attention. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on proofreading for small errors like missing articles or pluralization will help improve your accuracy.

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