Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
This line graph illustrates the different number of people particaptes in a different activities over the period of 2000 to 2020 in Melbourne, Australia.
In bar graph there are total of five different activites.
Table Tenis and Musical performance grow over these years constantly, however musical performances start later in 2005 but they have a great response over the time.
Film Club is the dominating and constant one it has highest number of participants ranging between 60-70 over these years showing its demand and consistency. Hopefully table tenis is going to compete this if it grows according to this rate.
Martial arts and amateur dramatics face uncertinities martial arts lies in the same position as it was 20 years ago but dramatics face a great downfall from past 15 years, in 2020 its participants drop to under 10.
Most dominating one is film club and least intrested one is amateur dramatics club.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, identifying the most popular and least popular activities. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you mention the growth of table tennis and musical performances, the description lacks specific data points to support these trends, which is essential for an Academic Task 1 response. Furthermore, the reference to the graph as a 'bar graph' is inaccurate, as it is a line graph. To improve, ensure you include specific figures (e.g., 'starting at 20 participants in 2000') to substantiate your claims and provide a more precise overview of the data trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into short paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical. Phrases like 'Most dominating one is' and 'Hopefully table tenis is going to' feel informal and do not effectively link ideas in a formal academic manner. The progression of ideas is clear, but the transition between the overview and the specific details could be smoother. Using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'in contrast', 'furthermore') would improve the flow and logical connection between sentences.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate to convey the main points, but it lacks the precision required for a higher band. There are several spelling errors, such as 'particaptes' instead of 'participating' and 'tenis' instead of 'tennis'. Additionally, the word choice is occasionally imprecise or informal, such as 'great response' or 'great downfall'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more academic collocations and ensure accurate spelling. Avoid informal phrasing like 'Hopefully' when describing data trends, as this is not appropriate for an objective report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. For example, 'the different number of people particaptes' is grammatically incorrect, and 'musical performances start later' should be in the past tense ('started'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some run-on sentences and missing commas. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of errors in basic verb tense and subject-verb agreement prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on consistent tense usage and sentence structure accuracy is recommended.
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