Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given line graph demonstrates different activities and their participants at a social gathering space in Melbourne, Australia for over two decade. The graph shows that the number of participants for film club are approximately around 65 marking the highest performed activity.

The participants member of the film club rose to almost the peak of 65 during the year 2020. However, a decade earlier to this peak in 2010 the film club participants marginally decreased to 60. We can also see the players for martial arts which comparatively are lesser in number. Martial arts members were around 35 during the year 2010 where this activity was played by highest number of people compared to the previous and upcoming decades.

Going further, there is a club for Amateur dramatics whose participants considerably decreased from around 20 people to less than 5 in 2020, showing a trend of dramatic fall.

In addition to all these activities there is Table tennis group, the players were lesser in number during the first decade from [redacted phone] but the next 10 years mark a drastic increase in the number of table tennis player to approximately 55 players in 2020 from 15 players in 2000. However, musical performances didn't have any performers till the first half decade

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have identified the main trends for the activities, such as the growth in table tennis and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, the response lacks a clear overview, which is essential for a Band 7 or higher. Your description of the data is sometimes inaccurate; for example, you state the film club reached a peak of 65 in 2020, but the graph shows it was higher in 2010. Additionally, the report ends abruptly without completing the description of musical performances. To improve, ensure you provide a concise summary of the overall trends in the introduction and verify your data points against the graph more carefully.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally repetitive. Phrases like 'Going further' and 'In addition to all these activities' are used, but the logical flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed. The transition between the description of different clubs could be smoother. To improve, try to group related trends together—for example, grouping declining activities versus increasing ones—and use a wider variety of linking words to connect your ideas more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the main points, such as 'marginally decreased', 'drastic increase', and 'dramatic fall'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'participants member' (should be 'membership' or 'number of participants') and 'highest performed activity' (which is not standard usage). Some phrasing is slightly awkward, such as 'first half decade'. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and ensure that your vocabulary is used in the correct grammatical context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text, such as 'for over two decade' (should be 'decades'), 'the players were lesser in number' (should be 'fewer'), and 'musical performances didn't have any performers till the first half decade' (incomplete sentence). While these errors do not typically impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and pluralisation to improve your accuracy.

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