Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given line illustrates number of people register for different activity at one of the public center in Melbourne, Australia during 2000 to 2010.
Overall it can be seen that activities like fan clubs and martial arts had shown fluctuation the other significant feature is that musical performance and table tennis had shown overall growth. In contrast to this, amateur dramatic had shown downfall.
the number of participants in fan club oscillate between 60 to 70 in all this four year while in table tennis there were around 18 players in 2000 which increase 20 in 2005 and after 2010 it show sudden growth nearly up to 50.
In contrast, musical performance started at 2005 shows drastically growth and had nearly 20 contestant in 2020. In addition to this martial fluctuate between 30 to 40 between 2000 to 2020 while amateur dramatic rose to 30 in 2005 then it show exceptionally decrement about 5 contestant in 2000.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, but there are significant inaccuracies in data reporting. For example, you mention the fan club oscillates between 60 and 70, but the graph shows a different trend. Furthermore, you state that amateur dramatic rose to 30 in 2005 and then dropped to 5 in 2000, which is chronologically impossible and misinterprets the data points. While you attempt to select and report main features, the lack of precision in reading the graph and the confusion regarding the timeline (mentioning 2000 to 2010 in the introduction while the graph covers 2000 to 2020) hinder the clarity of the summary.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For instance, 'In contrast to this' and 'In addition to this' are used, but the logical flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the progression of ideas is hampered by the inaccurate data reporting, making it difficult for the reader to follow the trends described. Paragraphing is present but could be more effectively used to group related trends.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You rely on basic verbs like 'shown', 'increase', and 'rose'. There are also issues with word choice and word forms, such as 'amateur dramatic' (should be 'amateur dramatics'), 'drastically growth' (should be 'drastic growth'), and 'exceptionally decrement' (which is not standard English). These errors occasionally impede communication, particularly when describing the data trends. To improve, you should focus on using more precise nouns and adjectives to describe trends, such as 'a significant increase' or 'a sharp decline'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('activities... had shown', 'it show sudden growth'), missing articles ('at one of the public center'), and incorrect tense usage. For example, 'it show exceptionally decrement about 5 contestant in 2000' is grammatically incoherent. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction and tense consistency prevents the response from reaching a higher band score.
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