Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The given graph illustrates the amount of participants in five different activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, It is clear that number of participants in Film club and martial arts has remained constant. Whereas, participants in table tennis and musical performance have increased significantly. number of Amateur dramatics has decreased slightly.
In 2000, Number of participants in Film club was above the 60 people and has decreased slightly at under 60 participants in 2010 and rose back to the same number of participants. However, frequency of Martial arts has started below 40 in 2000, and remained constant in given peroid with the peak of 40 in 2010.
In contrast, musical performances have started in 2005 with growth of approximately 20 participants in 2020. Whereas, table tennis have started with under 20 participants with slight increase from 2000 to 2010. From 2010, participants rose significantly from 20 to 50 by 2020. Number participants in amateur dramatic has increased from 2000 to 2005 to 30 and decrease drametically from 30 to 5 by 2020
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for all five activities. You have provided an overview and supported your points with data. However, there are some inaccuracies in your reporting; for example, you state that the Film club remained constant, but the graph shows fluctuations. Additionally, you mention that Amateur dramatics increased from 2000 to 2005 and then decreased, but the data points for 2000 and 2005 are not clearly distinguished in your description. To improve, ensure that your data points are precise and that your summary accurately reflects the visual information provided in the graph.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on different trends. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'However', and 'In contrast' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by mechanical phrasing and some awkward transitions. For instance, the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs could be smoother. Referencing is generally clear, but the structure within the paragraphs could be more sophisticated to improve the overall progression of information.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the main trends, using terms like 'increased significantly', 'remained constant', and 'decreased slightly'. However, there are some errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'amount of participants' (should be 'number of participants') and 'frequency of Martial arts' (which is imprecise). There are also some spelling errors, such as 'peroid' and 'drametically'. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise terminology for describing trends and ensure accurate spelling and word usage.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, particularly with articles (e.g., 'number of Amateur dramatics', 'the peak of 40') and subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'table tennis have started'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some missing capital letters after periods and unnecessary commas. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall clarity of the writing. Focusing on basic grammatical accuracy, especially with articles and pluralisation, will help improve your score.
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