Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The graph illustrates the numbers of participants for different activities at social centre in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.

At the top of the graph we have, Film club contestant with the highest number of participant in the graph. It has been in the range of 60-70 participant over the entire timeline of [redacted phone]. Next, we have Martial arts participants which has been in the range of about 30-40 participant from [redacted phone]. Moving ahead, we see a sharp decline in Amateur dramatics participants after 2005 which continued till 2020 from 27 participants to 5 participants respectively. Whereas in table tennis members were in the range of 10-20 percent till year 2010 but have increased rappidly to 35 participants in 2015 and 50 percent in the year 2020. Lastly, we have Musical performance participants which seems to be new and lowest enaged activity emerged in 2005 and have grown steadily till 15 participants in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main features of the graph, such as the consistent popularity of the Film club and the decline in Amateur dramatics. However, the response lacks a clear overview paragraph, which is essential for a high band score in Task 1. You have included specific data points, but the analysis is somewhat mechanical, listing trends activity by activity rather than grouping them logically to highlight significant comparisons. To improve, ensure you provide a concise summary of the overall trends in the introduction or immediately after, and focus more on comparing the activities rather than describing each one in isolation.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is coherent, and the information is presented in a logical order. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Next', 'Moving ahead', 'Whereas', and 'Lastly' to guide the reader. However, the paragraphing is insufficient; the entire response is written as a single block of text. For a higher score, you should divide your response into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs that group related data. Additionally, some transitions feel slightly repetitive or mechanical, which limits the flow of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'sharp decline', 'increased rapidly', and 'grown steadily'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and form, such as 'contestant' instead of 'club members' or 'participants', and 'enaged' (likely a typo for 'engaged'). You also incorrectly use 'percent' when the graph refers to the number of participants. To improve, focus on using more precise terminology for data description and ensure that your vocabulary is consistently accurate in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. For example, 'Film club contestant with the highest number of participant' lacks a verb and has a singular/plural noun error. There are also issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'Musical performance participants... have grown' (should be 'has grown' to agree with the singular subject 'performance' or 'participants... have grown'). Punctuation and article usage (e.g., 'at social centre') also need more attention to ensure clarity and accuracy.

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