Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The line graph illustrates changes in attendance at the Melbourne community center over the period from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the film club remained the most popular throughout the period, the musical performances club had the lowest attendance from 2000 to approximately 2014, before surpassing the amateur dramatics club in 2015. The martial art class fluctuated between about 31 and 39 participants, but it lost its second place in 2015. The table tennis club grew from about 16 to around 54 participants.

The film club consistently had the highest attendance over the period, fluctuating between about 60 and 65 people. The martial arts class was the second most popular class, fluctuating between about 31 and 39 participants, but it lost that place in 2015. That year, the table tennis club experienced the significant rise, rising from 20 to about 36 participants, despite being one of the least popular clubs over the previous 15 years.

In terms of the amateur dramatic club, it was the only club to show a steady decline over the majority of the period, after a slight increase from about 26 to 29 members between 2000 to 2005 followed by a steady fall to fewer than 10 people in the next 15 years. As regards the musical performances club, it had no participants from 2000 to 2005, but than its attendance increased significantly to approximately 20 people in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully identified the main trends and provided a clear overview of the data. You covered all categories and made relevant comparisons, such as noting the shift in popularity between the martial arts and table tennis clubs. However, there is some repetition between the second and third paragraphs, where you restate the fluctuations of the film club and martial arts class. To improve, ensure that the overview highlights the most significant trends without repeating the specific data points that should be reserved for the body paragraphs. Overall, the response is well-structured and addresses the prompt effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'In terms of', 'As regards', and 'however' to guide the reader. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate different categories. While the flow is generally good, some transitions between sentences feel slightly mechanical. To reach a higher band, focus on varying your cohesive devices and ensuring that the progression of ideas is smoother, particularly when moving between the different clubs in the body paragraphs.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey information clearly, using terms like 'fluctuated', 'surpassing', and 'steady decline'. There are some minor issues with word choice, such as 'experienced the significant rise' (should be 'a significant rise') and 'than its attendance' (should be 'then'). While you use some topic-specific vocabulary, incorporating more sophisticated collocations or synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' would enhance your score. The vocabulary is generally accurate and appropriate for an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. Most of your sentences are clear and easy to follow. There are a few grammatical slips, such as 'between 2000 to 2005' (should be 'between 2000 and 2005') and the aforementioned 'than' instead of 'then'. Punctuation is generally accurate, though some sentences could be refined for better flow. To improve, focus on ensuring consistent tense usage and correcting minor prepositional errors to increase the number of error-free sentences.

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