Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Given graph tells us about the number of participants in one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the year from 2000 to 2020 in different aqctivities.
Given data illustrates a graph containing different lines that shows distinct activities in centre. Along Y-axis the graph shows the number of participants from 0 to 70. On other side the X-axis shows the time range from 2000 to 2020.
The participants that were participating in film club were about 64 in the year of 2000. These attendee were gradually decreased upto 61 in 2005 and furthur decrease upto 60 in the year of 2010. Than it shows a gradual incline in number upto 64 again in the year of 2020. Now taking in consideration the attendee of the martial arts in the starting year i.e 2000 was about 36. In 2005 this was 30 in 2005 and than inclined to 40 in the year 2010. In 2015 this was 32. It than shows a gradual increase of about 35 in the year of 2020.
Number of participants in amateur dramatics was 35 in 2000. It than shows a slow increase upto 29 in 2005. From this it shows a decline of about 5 in the year of 2020. For the table tennis the participants at starting was about 17 in 2000 , than increases to a number of 20 in 2005 and remained steady till the year of 2010. It increases upto the number of 50 till the year of 2020.
Number of attendee in musical perfomances was zero in the year of 2005. From this year this number increases to 12 till the year of 2010. Than it shows a gradual increase of 15 in the year of 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all the main features of the graph, including the trends for each activity. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical, listing data points rather than synthesising information effectively. There is a lack of a clear overview or summary of the most significant trends, such as the overall growth in table tennis versus the relative stability of the film club. To reach a higher band, you should group information more logically and provide a concise summary of the main trends in the introduction or as a separate paragraph.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is repetitive. You rely heavily on listing data for each category sequentially. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Now taking in consideration' and 'From this', they are often used in a mechanical or slightly unnatural way. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the amateur dramatics section where the description of the trend is confusing. Improving the use of linking words to show contrast and comparison would enhance the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You frequently repeat words like 'participants', 'number', and 'year'. There are also some spelling errors, such as 'aqctivities', 'furthur', and 'perfomances'. While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is limited, and you struggle to use more sophisticated collocations to describe trends (e.g., using 'incline' as a noun instead of 'increase' or 'rise'). Expanding your range of synonyms for movement and change would be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'Given graph tells us' (missing article), 'These attendee were gradually decreased' (incorrect passive voice and pluralization), and 'the participants at starting was about 17' (subject-verb agreement). There are also issues with prepositions and tense consistency. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct article usage will help improve your accuracy.
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