Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The provided line graph illustrates information about participants for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, despite some fluctuations, flim club maintained the largest share throughout the period. Musical performances and table tennis observed an increase in 2020, while amateur dramatics witnessed a decrease in 2020. Martial arts remained relatively stable throughout.

Flim club started form the highest point at about 65, and decreased marginally to just above 60 in 2010, before rising to below 70 in 2020. Silmilarly, Table tennis and musical performances began from about 15 and 0 in 2000, and then rose to about 20 and 10 in 2010 respectively. Then Table tennis surged significantly to around 52 in 2020, while musical performances reach

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, as it is only 124 words long. Furthermore, the response is incomplete, ending abruptly mid-sentence ('while musical performances reach'). While you have identified the main features and provided an overview, the lack of completion significantly impacts the task achievement. To improve, you must ensure you cover all data points and complete your analysis. The failure to finish the report means that the final comparison and the description of the remaining categories are missing, which prevents a full summary of the information provided in the graph.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and a body paragraph. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'despite', and 'while' to link ideas. However, the abrupt ending disrupts the flow of the text. The progression of ideas is logical up until the point where the writing stops. To improve, ensure that you plan your time effectively so that you can complete your sentences and provide a cohesive conclusion or final summary. The use of referencing is generally clear, but the lack of completion makes the overall structure feel unfinished.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuations', 'maintained the largest share', and 'surged significantly'. There are some spelling errors, such as 'flim club' (film club) and 'Silmilarly' (Similarly), which are distracting. You also have some minor word choice issues, such as 'started form' instead of 'started from'. To reach a higher band, focus on accuracy in spelling and ensure that your collocations are precise. Expanding your range of descriptive verbs and adverbs would also help to better convey the trends shown in the graph.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'participants for different activities' (participants in), 'Musical performances and table tennis observed an increase' (which is slightly unnatural; 'saw an increase' is better), and the incomplete sentence at the end. While the meaning is generally clear, these errors and the lack of sentence completion limit the score. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and ensure that your complex sentences are punctuated correctly. Proofreading for basic errors like 'form' vs 'from' will also improve your accuracy.

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