Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The provided line graph illustrates the data on the numbers of individuals for various activities at one specific social centre located in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the film club had the largest group of members throughout those 20 years. The least muber

There are around five various activities provided from the graph. The graph also represents the years with only 5 years of difference which are 2000,2005,2010,2015 and 2020.

The table tennis group had the highest participants marginally from 2010 to 2020. The figures rose up higher from 2010 by almost having 50 above members in the table tennis.

Musical performances were the only one activity that started from the year 2005. It slowly built up the number of members from the least to around 15 candidates.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. Furthermore, the content is underdeveloped. While you identify some trends, the analysis is incomplete; for instance, you mention the film club had the largest group but provide no data to support this. The description of the table tennis group is vague, and the report lacks a clear summary of the main features or significant comparisons. To improve, ensure you cover all categories shown in the graph and provide specific data points to support your observations, ensuring the response is sufficiently detailed to meet the length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. The introduction is followed by an incomplete sentence, and the paragraphing is disjointed. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas; for example, the transition between the general overview and the specific details is abrupt. The paragraph regarding the table tennis group and musical performances feels like a list of isolated observations rather than a cohesive report. To improve, use linking words such as 'furthermore', 'in contrast', or 'consequently' to connect your sentences and ensure each paragraph has a clear focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'numbers', 'activities', and 'groups'. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'least muber' (which is incomplete) and 'candidates' to describe club members, which is not the most appropriate term in this context. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate a wider range of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a steady increase'. Avoid repeating the same structures and try to use more precise terminology.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'The least muber' (incomplete sentence) and 'The figures rose up higher from 2010 by almost having 50 above members'. The sentence structures are mostly simple, with limited attempts at complex sentences. There are also punctuation issues, such as the lack of spaces after commas in '2000,2005,2010,2015 and 2020'. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and practice using a variety of complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions.

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