Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph illustrates the sums of participants for different activities at one social media centre in Melbourne,Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
As, we see on chart the number of participants in film club in 2000 are on top with 65 perfect.Meanwhile, On second and third number martial artist and amataur dramatics were on percentage of 35 and 25 respectively.While on the other hand , Table tennis participants on last with 15 percent in 2000.Respectively, participants of musical performance were not on the list in 2000.
In 2005, The paricipants in film club was on top once again.Martial art participants are also on second place as like in 2000.But there was fall down in amataur dramatic participants by with percentage from 30 to 25.Table tennis participants was on progress with slight increasement.In 2005, Social was took initiative for musical performar.
In 2010,film club was on top once again with slight fall down.martial arts participants was on second. Amataur dramatics ,table tennis and musical performar was on 3rd 4th and 5th respectively.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to report on the data provided, but it fails to provide a clear overview or identify significant trends. The description is largely a list of data points for specific years (2000, 2005, 2010), which leads to a mechanical approach rather than a summary of main features. Furthermore, the response is incomplete as it stops at 2010, failing to cover the full period up to 2020. The lack of an overall trend analysis and the omission of the final decade significantly limit the achievement of the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often repetitive or misused, such as the frequent use of 'respectively' and 'on top'. Transitions between sentences are often abrupt, and the referencing is sometimes unclear. While there is a basic structure, the lack of a cohesive overview and the repetitive nature of the sentence starters hinder the flow of information. Paragraphing is present but does not effectively group the information in a way that highlights the key trends.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. There are several spelling errors (e.g., 'amataur', 'performar', 'increasement') and word choice issues (e.g., 'sums of participants' instead of 'number of participants', 'social was took initiative' which is grammatically and lexically incorrect). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data with precision, relying heavily on basic descriptors like 'on top' or 'on second place'. To improve, the student should focus on using more varied and accurate terminology related to data description.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'participants... was on top'), incorrect article usage, and awkward sentence structures (e.g., 'As, we see on chart'). The range of grammatical structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary commas and spacing issues. While the meaning is generally discernible, the high frequency of errors across basic sentence constructions prevents the response from reaching a higher band.
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