Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the data on the amount of participants for film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances at social center in Melbourne ,Australia between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, film club had highest amount of participants over the period and all activities experienced significant increase, while amateur dramatics followed downward trend.
To begin with, film club accounted for highest participants in 2000 from around 65 and remained relatively stable at 66 participants in 2020. Similarly, martial arts follow similar trend with minor fluctuation, which was accounted for approximately 35 people in 2000 and rose 40 people in 2010, after that participation decreased gradually at 35 respectively.
, table tennis attracted only just over 15 people in 2000, and increased gradually until 2010 rose to 20 participations, after that participants was increasing significantly hit to around 58 people after decade. Musical performances, on the other hand, beginning with 0 participants in 2005 which was climbed at 20 people in 2020. In contrast, amateur dramatics was only one activities which was follow downward trend it had jut over 25 people in 2000, before dropping sharply at attracted only 5 people in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the overall trends and specific data points. The overview is clear, identifying the film club as the most popular and noting the contrasting trends. However, there are some inaccuracies in the data reporting; for instance, the film club did not remain 'relatively stable' at 66, as the graph shows it starting at 65 and ending at 60. Additionally, the description of the musical performances starting at 0 in 2005 is a good observation, but the overall analysis could be more precise in comparing the activities throughout the period rather than just listing them sequentially.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is logically organized into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'To begin with', 'Similarly', and 'In contrast', which help guide the reader. However, some transitions are mechanical or slightly awkward, such as the comma at the start of the third paragraph and the phrasing 'after that participation decreased gradually at 35 respectively'. The referencing is generally clear, but the flow between sentences could be improved to avoid a list-like feel.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task, using terms like 'downward trend', 'fluctuation', and 'significantly'. However, there are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'amount of participants' (should be 'number of participants'), 'hit to around 58' (should be 'reached around 58'), and 'was follow' (should be 'followed'). These errors do not impede communication, but they demonstrate a limited control over more sophisticated lexical items.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses and subject-verb agreement, such as 'participants was increasing' and 'amateur dramatics was only one activities'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and an unnecessary comma at the start of the third paragraph. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the response from reaching a higher band.
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