Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line graph illustrates the data about the number of candidates who participated in five different activities namely, film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis, and musical performances at social centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, the highest number of participants were involved in film club activities, while the least number of candidates in musical performance over the period of 20 years.
In 2000, number of participants in film club were 64, which remained stable till year 2020. In martial arts, total number of participations were 37 which slightly fluctuated through the period of 20 years, while remained unchanged by year 2020.
The number of participants dropped significantly from 27 to 5 over the period of 20 years. In 2000, number of candidates who participated in table tennis competition were around 16 which increase gradually till year 2010 before it rose sharply to 52 by year 2020. In addition, social center lack musical performances in year 2000, their participations started from year 2005 with no number of candidates which increased significantly to 17 by the year 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
You have successfully identified the main features of the graph and provided a clear overview. You covered all five activities and made relevant comparisons, such as noting the film club's stability versus the table tennis growth. However, there are some inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, you stated the film club remained stable at 64, but the graph shows a slight decline, and your description of musical performances is confusing, as you mention 'no number of candidates' in 2005. To reach a higher band, ensure that data points are read with greater precision and that trends are described more accurately to reflect the visual evidence provided.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices such as 'while,' 'in addition,' and 'however' to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the paragraphing could be improved by grouping the trends more effectively (e.g., grouping increasing trends versus decreasing or stable ones). Referencing is generally clear, but the transition between the description of table tennis and musical performances feels slightly abrupt. Improving the variety of linking words would help the text flow more naturally.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'participated,' 'fluctuated,' and 'increased gradually.' There are some minor issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'social center lack musical performances' (should be 'lacked') and 'no number of candidates.' While you attempt to use some less common vocabulary, the phrasing is occasionally repetitive or slightly unnatural. To improve, focus on using more precise reporting verbs and nouns, such as 'remained constant' instead of 'remained stable' or 'experienced a sharp rise' rather than 'rose sharply.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement and articles. For example, 'number of participants... were 64' should be 'was 64,' and 'in year 2000' should be 'in the year 2000.' Additionally, some sentences are slightly awkward, such as 'their participations started from year 2005.' These errors do not impede communication, but they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on consistent verb tense usage and article placement will significantly improve your accuracy.
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