Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph compares five sectors in terms of the number of participants for different activities held at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Overall, what stands out from this graph that there is a considerable highest performance is the Film club and Amateur dramatics activity. Following, Medium performers area Martial arts and musical programmes and one interesting point is Musical performance is started in 2005 and ended in 2020 with modest performance of the decade. Table tennis tennis shown compared to others second highest growth noticed.
Looking for the details, in 2020 Film club is the started with 65 participants after 2010 it reduce to 60 persons and finally 2020 with ended with same starting point. Musical performance started in the year 2005 with 0 participants and it has shown continuous growth with following years and ended with approximately 19 percent, while Martial arts and film club shown some fluctuation but ended with same as where it has started 35 and 65 participants.
In conclusion, Amateur dramatics shown lowest performer and Table tennis is occupied 50 participants, while compared to others highest gaining achieved.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the main features of the graph, but the information provided is frequently inaccurate. For example, the student claims the Film club started at 65 participants and ended at the same point, which does not align with the visual data. Furthermore, the description of trends is confusing, and the data points mentioned are often incorrect or mislabeled. While the response covers all categories, the lack of accuracy in reporting the data significantly hinders the task achievement. To improve, ensure that you carefully read the axes and plot points before writing, and focus on clearly identifying the most significant trends rather than listing individual data points that may be misread.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is often disrupted by unclear sentence structures and confusing transitions. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical, such as 'Looking for the details' or 'Following, Medium performers area'. The progression of ideas is difficult to follow because the relationships between the data points are not clearly established. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'subsequently', 'meanwhile') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the data analysis.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and incorrect word choices, such as 'considerable highest performance' and 'modest performance of the decade'. The student struggles with precise terminology for describing trends, often relying on basic descriptors. There are also errors in word formation and collocation, such as 'Table tennis tennis shown'. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a significant increase', and ensure that you use these terms in the correct grammatical context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Musical performance is started'), tense usage (e.g., 'it reduce to'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack the necessary articles and prepositions to be grammatically sound. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring consistent verb tenses when describing past data, and proofreading for common errors like missing articles or incorrect verb forms.
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