Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The graph illustrates the numbers of participants for different activities at a social center in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, film club had the highest number of participant in the period given, while the least one table tennis in the year and amateur dramatics in the year 2020. Other activities were fluctuated with the time.
To begin with, around 65 participant chose film club in the year 2000, later which went down till the year 2010 around 60 participant. After than it started to rise again and reach around 70 in the year 2020. The least numbers of participant was in table tennis nearly 15, which rose around 20 in the year 2005 and stabled till the year 2010. Later, it faced significant rise and reached approximately 55 in the final year.
On the other hand, martial arts fluctuated around 35 to 40 during the entire period given. Amateur dramatics had around 25 participant in the year 2000 and 2005, which faced dramatically drop and reached around 8 in the year 2020. There were no participant in the musical performances in the year 2000 and 2005, but from year 2010 it stated to take part and reached around 15 in the year 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the overall trends and specific data points for the various activities. You successfully identified the most popular activity (film club) and the least popular ones at different intervals. However, the overview is slightly weak; while it mentions fluctuations, it could be more precise by highlighting the most significant changes, such as the dramatic rise in table tennis participation. The data is generally accurate, though the phrasing 'the least one table tennis' is awkward and slightly confusing. Overall, the response provides a clear summary of the information presented in the graph.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is logically organized into clear paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on different activities. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'To begin with', 'On the other hand', and 'After than', although some transitions are slightly mechanical or grammatically incorrect (e.g., 'After than' should be 'After that'). The progression of ideas is generally clear, and the information is grouped logically by activity type. While there is some minor repetition in sentence structure, the overall flow is sufficient to guide the reader through the data.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuated', 'significant rise', and 'dramatically drop'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'the least one table tennis' and 'stabled' (instead of 'stabilized' or 'remained stable'). Additionally, there are consistent issues with pluralization, such as '65 participant' instead of '65 participants'. While these errors do not impede communication, they limit the score as they show a lack of precision in using less common lexical items.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, particularly regarding subject-verb agreement and article usage (e.g., 'film club had', 'the least numbers of participant was'). The sentence 'Other activities were fluctuated with the time' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'Other activities fluctuated over time'. While the meaning remains clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. More attention to verb tenses and plural forms would significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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