Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The given line graph illustrates the numbers of people who took part in different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia from the year 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the film club was the most popular activity among people. The Amateur dramatics and the Musical performances had increased over time, however the table tennis showed upward trend. The Marital arts was quite famous and remined stable throughout the period.
In 2000, the Film club was the most popular activity with the highest numbers of participants, at around 65 and this figure continued to remain unchanged throughout the periods except a minor fluctuation in 2010.Similarly, the Martial arts had around 35 participants in 2000 and that number plateaued until 2020.In contrast, the Musical performances were least popular with no people at all, however the numbers stated to rise from 2005 and made up around 15 people at the end.
In 2000, approximately 25 people were participated in the Amateur dramatics. It had increased steadily until 2005 and then decreased to around 18 people. That figure further declined dramatically to around 5 people, making it least popular among the people. In contrast, the Table tennis showed an upward trend from 2000 to 2010 at around 20 people, which later outraced the Amateur dramatics and peaked around 50 people, being a popular activity in social center after the Film club.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the overall trends and specific data points. You successfully identified the most popular activity (Film club) and the least popular at the end of the period (Amateur dramatics). However, there are some inaccuracies in data reporting; for instance, you mentioned Musical performances started with 'no people at all', whereas the graph shows a starting point of approximately 5. Additionally, the description of the Amateur dramatics trend is slightly confusing regarding the timeline. To improve, ensure that data points are read precisely and that the overview clearly highlights the most significant trends without needing to list every minor fluctuation.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In contrast', 'Similarly', and 'Overall' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by mechanical phrasing and some awkward transitions between sentences. For example, the transition between the discussion of Martial arts and Musical performances in the third paragraph is a bit abrupt. Paragraphing is used appropriately, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs could be strengthened by using a wider variety of linking words to show relationships between the data points more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'plateaued', 'fluctuation', and 'upward trend'. However, there are some word choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'Marital arts' (likely a typo for Martial arts), 'numbers stated to rise' (should be 'started'), and 'outraced' (which is not the most natural choice for describing a graph trend; 'surpassed' or 'overtook' would be better). While your vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main points, it lacks the precision and sophistication required for a higher band score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'were participated' (passive voice error), 'the numbers stated to rise', and 'being a popular activity in social center' (missing article 'the'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall fluency. To reach a higher band, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and ensuring that passive constructions are used accurately.
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