Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given line graph illustrates the numbers of people who took part in different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia from the year 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the film club was the most popular activity among people. The table tennis and the musical performances had increased over time, however the amateur dramatics showed downward trend. The marital arts was quite popular and remained stable throughout the period.

In 2000, the film club was the most popular activity with the highest numbers of participants, at around 65 and this figure continued to remain unchanged throughout the period except a minor fluctuation in 2010. Similarly, the martial arts had around 35 participants in 2000 and that number plateaued until 2020. In contrast, the musical performances were least popular with no people at all, however the numbers started to rise from 2005 and made up around 15 people at the end.

In 2000, approximately 25 people participated in the amateur dramatics. It had increased steadily until 2005 and then decreased to around 18 people by 2010. That figure further declined dramatically to around 5 people in 2020, making it least popular among the people. In contrast, the table tennis showed an upward trend from 2000 to 2010 at around 20 people, which later surpassed the amateur dramatics and peaked around 50 people, being a popular activity in the social center after the film club.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main features and trends of the graph. You provided a clear overview and supported your points with relevant data from the chart. However, there are some inaccuracies in your reporting. For instance, you stated that musical performances had 'no people at all' in 2000, but the graph shows a starting point of approximately 5. Additionally, you mentioned that table tennis 'peaked around 50 people', whereas the graph indicates it reached approximately 40. Accuracy in data reporting is crucial for a higher band score. Ensure you double-check your readings against the axes to avoid misrepresenting the information provided.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs that group information by activity. You use a variety of cohesive devices such as 'In contrast', 'Similarly', and 'throughout the period' to link ideas effectively. The progression of information is generally smooth, though the transition between the second and third body paragraphs could be slightly more refined. Overall, the paragraphing is appropriate, and the information is easy to follow, meeting the requirements for a coherent response.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey information clearly, using terms like 'plateaued', 'fluctuation', 'downward trend', and 'surpassed'. There are some minor errors in word choice, such as 'marital arts' instead of 'martial arts'. While you attempt to use less common vocabulary, some collocations are slightly unnatural. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensure correct spelling of key terms. The range is adequate for the task, but further precision would elevate the score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is good. There are some grammatical slips, such as 'the musical performances had increased' (should be 'have increased' or 'increased') and 'the marital arts was' (should be 'martial arts were'). Additionally, there are minor issues with articles, such as 'the amateur dramatics' and 'the table tennis', where the definite article is often unnecessary. Despite these errors, your meaning is always clear, and the errors do not impede communication.

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