Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line chart presents the data about the proportion of individuals participating across various activities at one of Melbourne's community centre in Australia between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, there are different trends across all activities, some activities saw almost no growth, while some experienced upward trend and one activity see a huge decline in its participants over a period of 2000 to 2020.
In 2000, the figures of participants for amateur dramatics and table tennis were approximately 26 and 16 respectively. The number of people joining table tennis rose to 20 and remain almost same until 2010. Onwards, table tennis participants increased rapidly and peaked at around 50 in 2020. On the other hand, figures for amateur dramatics begun declining dramatically from approximately 30 members in 2005 to around 8 members by 2020.\
Musical performances activity has no participant until 2005. The figures for musical performances continuously grew and reached at around 16 members in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, including the overall trends and specific data points for the three activities. However, the reporting of data is occasionally inaccurate; for example, you mention amateur dramatics began at 26 in 2000, but the graph shows it starting higher, and your description of the decline starting in 2005 is not fully supported by the visual data. While you identify the key trends, the lack of precision in data reporting prevents a higher score. To improve, ensure that your data points are read carefully from the axes and that you make more explicit comparisons between the activities rather than just listing them individually.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs for the specific details. There is a clear progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and limited. Phrases like 'On the other hand' and 'Onwards' are used, but the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs could be smoother. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes slightly unclear, such as the transition into the final paragraph regarding musical performances. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring they are used naturally will help elevate the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'participating', and 'dramatically'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'figures of participants' (should be 'number of participants') and 'musical performances activity has no participant' (should be 'had no participants'). There is also a minor error in 'community centre' (should be plural 'centres' or singular with 'a'). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the meaning, it lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands. Focus on learning common collocations related to data description.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. Examples include 'one of Melbourne's community centre' (should be 'centres'), 'figures... were approximately 26' (should be 'the figure was'), 'begun declining' (should be 'began'), and 'reached at around' (should be 'reached around'). While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. You should focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of verb tenses when describing past trends to improve your accuracy.
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