Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given line graph illustrates the numbers of candidates ,who participated in five different activities at a community hub in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 to 2020.

Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that the table tennis and musical performances showed upward trend. However, the amateurs dramatics declined throughout the given period.

To commence with, around 15 participants were like table tennis in initial year, then it grows steadily in a decade, Therefore, it rose dramatically to 55 during 2020. moreover, no candidate liked the musical performance in 2000 but the interest began in 2005 and grow to 15 in the given last year.

Following by, 25 contestants participated in the amateur dramatics in the Australia, the numbers increased steadily in next few years, but declined gradually to only 5 in 2020. Furthermore, a large number of individuals liked film club and martial arts accounted for 65 and 35 respectively, then both showed fluctuations and stucked at same numbers.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for all five activities. The overview is clear and identifies the main upward and downward trends. However, the reporting of data is sometimes inaccurate or confusing. For instance, stating that 'no candidate liked the musical performance in 2000' is a reasonable interpretation, but the description of the film club and martial arts as 'stucked at same numbers' is vague and fails to accurately describe the final data points. While the main features are selected, the lack of precision in reporting the figures prevents a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. Cohesive devices such as 'Looking from an overall perspective', 'To commence with', and 'Following by' are used to link ideas. However, some transitions are awkward or grammatically incorrect, such as 'Following by' and the misuse of 'Therefore' in the middle of a sentence. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the mechanical nature of the linking words occasionally hinders the flow of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task, with attempts to use descriptive terms like 'dramatically', 'steadily', and 'fluctuations'. However, there are noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'candidates' instead of 'participants', 'amateurs dramatics' instead of 'amateur dramatics', and the non-standard verb form 'stucked'. These errors do not impede communication, but they demonstrate a limited control over more precise academic vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('it grows steadily'), incorrect preposition usage ('in initial year'), and awkward phrasing ('15 participants were like table tennis'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary commas and capitalization errors. While the meaning remains understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar limits the score to the 5.0–5.5 range.

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