Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 7.0)
The line graphs illustrates the number of participants for different activities at social center in melborune Australia for the period 2000 to 2020
Overall the film club remained the most popular activity throughout this period , while table tennis experienced an significant growth overall. In contrast participations in music department declined constantly.
In 2000, the film club had the highest number of participants, at approximately 64, followed by martial arts with 36 people. The number of film club members fell gradually to 60 in 2010, before recovering to 64 in 2015 and reaching 66 in 2020. By comparison, participation in martial arts fluctuated between 32 and 38 participants over the period. It decreased from 36 in 2000 to 32 in 2005, then rose to 38 in 2010 before falling to 34 in 2015 and returning to 36 in 2020.
The other three activities experienced more noticeable changes. Participation in amateur dramatics increased slightly from 26 in 2000 to 28 in 2005, but then declined steadily to 20 in 2010, 14 in 2015 and just 6 in 2020. In contrast, table tennis became increasingly popular, rising from 16 participants in 2000 to 20 in 2005 and 2010, before increasing sharply to 36 in 2015 and 54 in 2020. Finally, musical performances had no participants in 2000 and 2005, but the figure subsequently rose to 12 in 2010, 16 in 2015 and 18 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The response effectively covers all requirements of the task. You have successfully identified the main trends, such as the film club's consistent popularity and the significant growth of table tennis. The overview provides a clear summary of the key features, and the data is accurately selected and reported throughout the body paragraphs. Comparisons are made appropriately, such as contrasting the decline in amateur dramatics with the rise in table tennis. To reach a higher band, ensure that the overview is more distinct and perhaps more comprehensive in capturing the overall 'big picture' of all five categories rather than focusing on just three.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The response is logically organized, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs that group information by activity type. Cohesive devices such as 'In contrast', 'By comparison', and 'Finally' are used effectively to guide the reader through the data. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate different trends. The progression of ideas is clear throughout the text. To improve further, ensure that the transition between the overview and the first body paragraph is slightly smoother, and avoid minor punctuation errors that occasionally disrupt the flow of the sentences.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey information with precision, using terms like 'fluctuated', 'declined steadily', and 'increasingly popular'. There are some minor errors, such as 'an significant growth' (should be 'a significant growth') and 'participations' (should be 'participation'). While the vocabulary is adequate for the task, incorporating a slightly wider variety of collocations and more sophisticated reporting verbs would elevate the response. The spelling of 'melborune' is a minor slip that should be corrected.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures effectively. Most sentences are clear and error-free, though there are some grammatical slips, such as 'The line graphs illustrates' (subject-verb agreement error) and the missing article in 'at social center'. Punctuation is generally handled well, although there are some inconsistent spaces before commas. The control of grammar is good, and the errors present do not impede communication. To achieve a higher score, ensure consistent subject-verb agreement and pay closer attention to article usage.
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