Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph illustrates the information about the number of participants for different activities at single social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
There are number of participants for different activites at one centre in Melbourne, Australia in the year between 2000 to 2020. There are various activites such as Film club, Martial arts, Amature dramatics, Table tennis and musical performances. In 2000, The most popular activity in social centre is Flim club. However the least popular activity is table tennis. There was no participants were joined in Musical performance. In the year 2020, the most populated activity was Film club. There were 68 peoples who was active in club. Nevertheless, there were only 5 people who joined musical performance which is least participants among all others.
In conclusion, There were various activites was active at social centre in Melbourne, Australia in the year between 2000 to 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the task by identifying some main features, such as the popularity of the Film club and the low participation in musical performances. However, the report is quite superficial. It fails to provide a comprehensive overview of the trends over the 20-year period, focusing only on the start and end points. The data selection is limited, and the lack of comparative analysis between the different activities throughout the period prevents a higher score. To improve, you should group data logically and describe the trends (e.g., increases or decreases) rather than just listing isolated figures for two specific years.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into three very short paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is weak. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas together; the text feels like a series of disconnected statements. For example, the transition between the introduction and the body is abrupt. While there is an attempt at a conclusion, it merely repeats information from the introduction rather than summarizing the main trends. Using linking words like 'consequently', 'in contrast', or 'meanwhile' would help improve the flow and logical connection between your points.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You use basic terms like 'popular' and 'activity' multiple times. There are also spelling errors such as 'activites' (activities), 'Amature' (Amateur), and 'Flim' (Film). The phrase 'most populated activity' is an incorrect collocation; 'most popular' or 'highest participation' would be more accurate. To reach a higher band, you need to demonstrate a wider range of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'witnessed a significant rise', or 'accounted for'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'There were various activites was active'), article usage (e.g., 'at single social centre'), and pluralization (e.g., '68 peoples'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and the attempt at complex sentences often results in errors, such as 'There was no participants were joined'. You need to focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that you use articles and prepositions correctly before attempting more complex structures.
See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.